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However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective and it also depends on person to person. v.1

However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective and it also depends on person to person. v. 1
In this present world, learning a new language is of the most popular aspects of our lives. However, there is still an ongoing debate on whether learning a new language is related only to working or travelling purposes or there are other reasons for it. The argument that learning a new language is related only with travelling or working in a foreign country is an argument that is both agreed and disagreed with by many. The two sides of this argument will be thoroughly analysed and discussed in this essay before drawing a reasoned conclusion. First of all, lots of people try to learn a new language in order to prevent any communication problems that they could face when they are abroad for travelling or working purposes. For example, a Chinese man might have some difficulties in terms of communicating with the locals when he is in Africa. Another example is a Vietnamese man working in a coffee shop in France. It would be very challenging for him to communicate with people without any knowledge of the French language. This is why some people argue that learning a new language is associated only with travelling and working purposes. Nevertheless, learning a foreign language could be related to educational purposes. For instance, nowadays, lots of students want to study abroad in terms of getting their master's degree, since it would be beneficial for their career. Generally, those students have to prove that they have a basic knowledge of that country’s language in order to get admission. Therefore, it is clear that learning a new language is not associated only with travelling or working purposes, rather it could be related to educational purposes. To sum up, reasons for learning a foreign language is still argued by many. However, after a thorough analysis, it is clear that besides travelling and working abroad, there could be other reasons for learning a foreign language. Therefore, I disagree with the idea that suggests travel to or work in a foreign country is the only reason for learning a foreign language.
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new
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language
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related
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reasons
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country is an argument
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analysed
and discussed in this essay
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before
drawing a reasoned conclusion.

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prevent
any communication problems that they could face when they are abroad for
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or
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working
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purposes
.
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, a Chinese
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man
might have
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difficulties in terms of communicating with the locals when he is in Africa. Another example is a Vietnamese
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man
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working
in a coffee shop in France. It would be
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very
challenging for him to communicate with
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people
without any knowledge of the French
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language
. This is why
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some
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argue that
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purposes.

Nevertheless
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to educational
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.
For instance
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Generally
, those students
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have to
prove that they have a basic knowledge of that country’s
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language
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get
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abroad, there could be other
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foreign
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language
.
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idea
that suggests travel to or work in a
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foreign
country is the
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective and it also depends on person to person. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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