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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

For scientists and pharmaceutical industries, the use of animals as a “testing machine” for a newly developed drug is widely accepted. Notwithstanding, a huge amount of people, regardless of whether animal welfare officer, people, that feel pity for those animals or even scientist are against those animal experiments. On first sight, using animals instead of human beings as experimental content is beneficial. The reproduction of animals is fast, mice, for instance, carry out many children per delivery and they can deliver several times a year. Thus, the use of animals is cheap, and it can be sure, that the requested animals are always available. Furthermore, in certain behaviours, the reaction of an animalistic organism towards a given drug is the same as the humane one. As a consequence, drugs can get safer without affecting any human body. Also, testing recently developed drugs at a human body, without knowing about possible side effects, is ethically controversial. However, this argument, regarded from the point of view of the animals´ honour, can be mentioned by reviewers as well. They will admit that every individual has a right to life and it can not easily be said that the human soul or life is worthier than the one of an animal. Furthermore, an animal can´t complain. If it suffers from the given drug, there is no way to escape from this situation. Moreover, testing drugs at animals does not guarantee the lack of side effects in the human body. For certain drugs, animal experiments will be sufficient, but in certain cases, they won´t. Thus, the suffer and pain of the animals was insignificant. To conclude, testing drug at animals is controversial both, using or not using animals as a testing object has its advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, animal experiments are redundant. If a newly developed drug needs to be tested, in-situ test can be done, such as cultivating the target cells and then adding the substance. Thus, the experiment can be done in a culture dish and no animal will suffer from pain.
For scientists and pharmaceutical industries, the
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welfare officer,
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, that feel pity for those
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animals
or even scientist are against those
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experiments.

On
first
sight, using
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animals
instead
of
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beings as experimental content is beneficial. The reproduction of
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animals
is
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fast
, mice,
for instance
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children per
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delivery and
they can deliver several times a year.
Thus
, the
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cheap
, and it can be sure, that the requested
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are always available.
Furthermore
, in certain
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behaviours
, the reaction of an animalistic organism towards a
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is the same as the
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one. As a consequence,
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can
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get
safer without affecting any
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human
body.
Also
,
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recently developed
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drugs
at a
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human
body, without knowing about possible side effects, is
ethically
controversial.

However
, this argument, regarded from the point of view of the
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animals´
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honour
, can
be mentioned
by reviewers
as well
. They will admit that every individual has a right to
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life and
it can not
easily
be said
that the
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human
soul or life is worthier than the one of an
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animal
.
Furthermore
, an
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animal
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can´t
complain. If it suffers from the
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, there is no way to escape from this situation.
Moreover
,
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testing
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drugs
at
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animals
does not guarantee the lack of side effects in the
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human
body. For certain
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drugs
,
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animal
experiments will be sufficient,
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in certain cases, they
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.
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,
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the suffer
and pain of the
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was insignificant.

To conclude
,
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at
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animals
is controversial both, using or not using
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animals
as a
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testing
object has its advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion,
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animal
experiments are redundant. If a
newly
developed
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drug
needs to be
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tested
,
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in-situ
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can
be done
, such as cultivating the target cells and then adding the substance.
Thus
, the experiment can
be done
in a culture dish and no
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animal
will suffer from pain.
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IELTS essay Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments.

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