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Some people believe that travelling alone really benefits in learning a country's culture and experience, while others believe it is better to travel with someone you know. Discuss both these views and share your opinion. v.3

Some people believe that travelling alone really benefits in learning a country's culture and experience, while others believe it is better to travel with someone you know. v. 3
Due to the advancement of technology, travelling has become very convenient and cheap. It promotes national and international travel. Some people opine that visiting to new countries to get exposure of tradition and culture is beneficial when travelled alone while others believe that travelling in a group is beneficial. Both the trends have their own significance. But, in my opinion, I think that visiting in a group is much better. This essay shall discuss both the views. When individuals visit alone to various places then they can roam around the city freely without any interference. In this way, they can learn a lot about the customs and languages spoken by the individuals of the visited location. Besides that, they can stay at any location according to their budget and comfort. Moreover, when people travel alone then they get more chances to interact with the local people and can understand lifestyle, choices, language spoken by the natives in a better way. On the other hand, group travel is a boon for the travellers. Firstly, whole trip budget get divided among all and they do not have to spend much. However, when individuals travel alone, they have to manage whole budget of the trip themselves. Secondly, visitors do not feel alone when visiting with their friends or family members and can explore the new locations while spending quality them with their loved ones. Last but not the least, travellers in a group have support of each other and they do not become victim of theft, snatching and other crimes but, this may happen when travelling alone in a new country. In conclusion, I would like to say that both travelling alone and in a group have importance in their own way. Although, visiting with friends or family is safer, affordable and safer.
Due to the advancement of technology,
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travelling
has become
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very
convenient and
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cheap
. It promotes national and international
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travel
.
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Some
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people
opine that visiting to new countries to
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get
exposure of tradition and culture is beneficial when travelled
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alone
while others believe that
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travelling
in a
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group
is beneficial. Both the trends have their
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own
significance.
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But
, in my opinion, I
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think
that visiting in a
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group
is much better. This essay shall discuss both the views.

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When
individuals visit
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alone
to various places then they can roam around the city
freely
without any interference. In this way, they can learn a lot about the customs and languages spoken by the individuals of the visited location.
Besides
that, they can stay at any location according to their budget and comfort.
Moreover
, when
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people
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travel
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alone
then they
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get
more chances to interact with the local
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people
and can understand lifestyle, choices, language spoken by the natives in a better way.

On the
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other
hand,
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group
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travel
is a boon for the
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travellers
.
Firstly
, whole trip budget
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get
divided among
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all and
they do not
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have to
spend much.
However
, when individuals
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travel
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alone
, they
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have to
manage whole budget of the trip themselves.
Secondly
, visitors do not feel
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alone
when visiting with their friends or family members and can explore the new locations while spending quality them with their
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loved
ones. Last
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but
not the least,
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travellers
in a
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group
have support of each
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other and
they do not become victim of theft, snatching and
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other
crimes
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but
, this may happen when
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travelling
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alone
in a new country.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that both
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travelling
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alone
and in a
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group
have importance in their
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own
way. Although, visiting with friends or family is safer, affordable and safer.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that travelling alone really benefits in learning a country's culture and experience, while others believe it is better to travel with someone you know. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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