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Some people think that experiments on animals is cruel whereas others are aginest them. discuss other views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that experiments on animals is cruel whereas others are aginest them. discuss other views and give your opinion. v. 2
Certain individuals believe that the experimentation on animals is cruel, whereas, others are against them and they claim that it is crucial for scientific research and advancements. Both views will be depicted in impending paragraphs. There are numerous reasons about why people think that experiments on animals are cruel activities. first and foremost is animal death during experiment. When researchers find new medicines they test these medicines on animals and sometimes, animals lose their lives. So because of human development, animals are dying that is the reason some people are against them. secondly, animals are helping to keep up eco-system balance so doing maximum experiments on them can make problems. For instance, according to survey conducted by harvest university shows that the amount of chimpanzees is reducing every year because they are captured by humans for experiments. In contrast, it is claimed by some people that experiments on animals help scientists to find new pills. firstly, when they find new medicines so the experiment on animals help them to know about what are drawbacks and merits. Secondly, these experiment sometimes help to know about how animals are using their brains to solve problems. To illustrate, in multifarious lab, people are making some obstacles in and animals strive to solve these. consequently, research find that chimpanzees activities are similar to human and their mind is more developed as compare to other animals. To conclude, both views have it' s own pros and crons. but in my perspective the experiments on animals help to know about the disadvantages of medicines and their behaviour towards human being.
Certain individuals believe that the experimentation on
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animals
is cruel, whereas, others are against
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them and
they claim that it is crucial for scientific research and advancements. Both views will
be depicted
in impending paragraphs.

There are numerous reasons about why
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people
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that
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experiments
on
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animals
are cruel activities.
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first
and foremost is
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animal
death during
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experiment
. When researchers
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find
new medicines they
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test
these medicines on
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animals
and
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sometimes
,
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animals
lose their
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lives
.
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because
of
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human
development,
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animals
are dying
that is
the reason
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some
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people
are against them.
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secondly
,
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animals
are helping to
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keep
up
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eco-system
balance
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so
doing maximum
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experiments
on them can
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make
problems.
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, according to survey conducted by harvest university
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shows
that the amount of chimpanzees is reducing every year
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because
they
are captured
by
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humans
for experiments.

In contrast
, it
is claimed
by
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some
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people
that
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experiments
on
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animals
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help
scientists to
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find
new pills.
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firstly
, when they
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find
new medicines
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so
the
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experiment
on
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animals
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help
them to know about what are drawbacks and merits.
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, these
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experiment
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sometimes
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help
to know about how
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animals
are using their brains to solve problems. To illustrate, in multifarious lab,
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people
are making
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some
obstacles in and
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animals
strive to solve these.
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consequently
, research
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find
that chimpanzees activities are similar to
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human
and their mind is more developed as compare to other animals.

To conclude
, both views have
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pros and
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.
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but
in my perspective the
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experiments
on
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animals
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help
to know about the disadvantages of medicines and their
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behaviour
towards
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human
being.
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IELTS essay Some people think that experiments on animals is cruel whereas others are aginest them. discuss other views and give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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