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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environment responsibility While others believe that tourists should not accept any responsiblity at all. To what Extend do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environment responsibility While others believe that tourists should not accept any responsiblity at all. v. 1
It is believed by many that travellers should serve their social and environmental responsibilities. On the other hand, there are people who are not in support of this idea. According to me, travellers are responsible for damaging the nature and they should serve their part in conserving the environment. Firstly, in today's generation, youth is intrigued by the thought of travelling around the world. Moreover, low budget airlines are also helping the cause of travellers, which help them to plan their trips abroad cheaply. But, this has led to various hazardous problems resulting in issues such as climate change, global warming etc. Additionally, a recent survey by environmentalists suggest that increase in number of tourists in a country will result in a significant increase in pollution index of that country. Secondly, tourists should understand that hurting social sentiments of the people of the host place might render locals to form a bad impression for them. This could stop local to help the needy tourists when they are in a difficult situation. Moreover, the main purpose of travelling is to get to know about different cultures and if they don't behave socially responsible will foster locals to shun tourists. Contrastingly, local governments should also impose strict laws so that tourists are bound to follow them. Additionally, government can levy heavy fines and punishments which will stimulate travellers to abide by laws. Furthermore, adequate arrangements for disposable of waste should be done by local governments so that tourists do not litter at public places. To conclude, it is the full responsibility of the tourists to abide by social laws of the host place. Moreover, travelling is all about enjoying the scenic beauty of a place and if that is hampered might not serve its purpose.
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is believed
by
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many
that
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travellers
should serve their social and environmental responsibilities.
On the other hand
, there are
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people
who are not in support of this
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idea
.
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According to me
,
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travellers
are responsible for damaging the
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nature and
they should serve their part in conserving the environment.

Firstly
, in
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today
's generation, youth
is intrigued
by the
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thought
of travelling around the world.
Moreover
, low budget airlines are
also
helping the cause of
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travellers
, which
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help
them to plan their trips abroad
cheaply
.
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But
, this has led to various hazardous problems resulting in issues such as climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
, global warming etc.
Additionally
, a recent survey by environmentalists suggest that increase in number of
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tourists
in a country will result in a significant increase in pollution index of that country.

Secondly
,
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tourists
should understand that hurting social sentiments of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of the host place might render
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locals
to form a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impression for them. This could
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stop
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local
to
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help
the needy
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tourists
when they are in a difficult situation.
Moreover
, the main purpose of travelling is to
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get
to know about
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different
cultures and if they don't behave
socially
responsible will foster
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locals
to shun tourists.

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Contrastingly
,
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local
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governments
should
also
impose strict laws
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so
that
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tourists
are bound
to follow them.
Additionally
,
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government
can levy heavy fines and punishments which will stimulate
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travellers
to abide by laws.
Furthermore
, adequate arrangements for disposable of waste should
be done
by
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local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that
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tourists
do not litter at public places.

To conclude
, it is the full responsibility of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
to abide by social laws of the host place.
Moreover
, travelling is all about enjoying the scenic beauty of a place and if that
is hampered
might not serve its purpose.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environment responsibility While others believe that tourists should not accept any responsiblity at all. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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