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Some people believe that to be successful at sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

Some people believe that to be successful at sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 1
People think that to be successful at sport you require both natural understanding and also the along with that you need that hard struggle and system which helps you to become a successful man in their life. If we consider the hard performance and system, I think that this two surely help an individual to be successful in their career. And also at the same people should encourage an individual who is struggling to achieve their goal. I think that people also require process frequently so that they can master the particular game in which they are interested in. At the same time, parents should encourage the children in this activity apart from their academic curriculum. Along with the hard struggle students should concentrate on it and also willingness to endeavor on it even if they fails many times. Now, in regards to the natural intelligence. All the educational institutions should provide this opportunity for all the students along with their studies. Students also require the physical exercise which sharpens their thinking capacity. Later, we can observe the substantial increase in their natural capacity if they do the task in the field they are particularly interested. Which in turn we can consider this as a great encouragement for the students if the schools introduce sports as a part of their academic curriculum. And also if the human is very much interested in sports and if they don't get an opportunity to grab, it will deter their confidence level. In conclusion, both natural strength, hard performance and habit help students achieve their goals and to be successful in their career. Natural capability alone is not sufficient because a guy needs more and more method which helps them to identify mistakes and pay more attention towards it.
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that to be
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successful
at sport you require both
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natural
understanding and
also
the along with that you need that
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hard
struggle and system which
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helps
you to become a
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successful
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man
in their life.

If we consider the
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performance and system, I
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that this two
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help
an individual to be
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successful
in their career. And
also
at the same
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people
should encourage an individual who is struggling to achieve their goal. I
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think
that
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people
also
require process
frequently
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so
that they can master the particular game in which they
are interested
in. At the same time, parents should encourage the children in this activity apart from their academic curriculum. Along with the
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hard
struggle
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students
should concentrate on it and
also
willingness to endeavor on it even if they
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fails
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many
times.

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Now
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the
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intelligence. All the educational institutions should provide this opportunity for all the
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students
along with their studies.
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Students
also
require the physical exercise which sharpens their thinking capacity. Later, we can observe the substantial increase in their
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natural
capacity if they do the task in the field they are
particularly
interested. Which in turn we can consider this as a great encouragement for the
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students
if the schools introduce sports as a part of their academic curriculum. And
also
if the human is
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very
much interested in sports and if they don't
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get
an opportunity to grab, it will deter their confidence level.

In conclusion
, both
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natural
strength,
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hard
performance and habit
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help
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students
achieve their goals and to be
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successful
in their career.
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Natural
capability alone is not sufficient
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because
a guy needs more and more method which
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helps
them to identify mistakes and pay more attention towards it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to be successful at sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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