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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 1
It is often seen that, one succeeds in sports, if he has a natural instinct towards the game, however, it is also proven by many players that continuous effort and perseverance has given them triumphs over others. In my essay, I would discuss from both perspectives before reaching a conclusion. On the one hand, passion and innate talent are very vital for reaching excellence for an athlete to thrive. If a person is born with the aptitude and predisposition towards a particular game, the amount of resolution and practice that needs to be put towards reaching a goal would be substantially lesser than that of his peers. For example, Brett Lee, a well-known cricketer had natural ability of pace bowling which helped him break all records in the world of cricket. On the other hand, skill can only be a stepping stone towards prospering in the game, whereas, continuous training and working hard would assure one the victory. It can also be stated that every individual is born with equal opportunities, but, the commitment and dedication of an individual is what aids him to become a star. For example, Sachin Tendulkar, the worlds top-notch cricketer, practised daily for two years without a break, which made him the master of batting. Having natural ability can make one successful, but adding effort to it can make one even more. To conclude, it is quite evident that both the sides have seen greatness, triggering people to reach different views. In my opinion, no matter how great the innate talent of a player is, his achievement would fall short of the one who has given abundant time and endeavor to improve his skills and build his drive toward the game.
It is
often
seen
that, one succeeds in sports, if he has a natural instinct towards the game,
however
, it is
also
proven by
many
players that continuous effort and perseverance has
given
them triumphs over others. In my essay, I would discuss from both perspectives
before
reaching a conclusion.

On the one hand, passion and innate talent are
very
vital for reaching excellence for an athlete to thrive. If a person
is born
with the aptitude and predisposition towards a particular game, the amount of resolution and practice that needs to
be put
towards reaching a goal would be
substantially
lesser than that of his peers.
For example
, Brett Lee, a well-known cricketer had natural ability of pace bowling which
helped
him break all records in the world of cricket.

On the other hand
,
skill
can
only
be a stepping stone towards prospering in the game, whereas, continuous training and working
hard
would assure one the victory. It can
also
be stated
that every individual
is born
with equal opportunities,
but
, the commitment and dedication of an individual is what aids him to become a star.
For example
,
Sachin
Tendulkar
, the worlds top-notch cricketer,
practised
daily for two years without a break, which made him the master of batting. Having natural ability can
make
one successful,
but
adding effort to it can
make
one even more.

To conclude
, it is quite evident that both the sides have
seen
greatness, triggering
people
to reach
different
views. In my opinion, no matter how great the innate talent of a player is, his achievement would fall short of the one who has
given
abundant time and endeavor to
improve
his
skills
and build his drive toward the game.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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