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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.4

Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 4
Nowadays, sport is the most entertainment providing activity because the inhabitants indulge in it as well as everyone can gain strong health. Few think that natural strength is required to win in sport while others say that working hard as well as practicing in the nets can bring success. In my opinion, to become a victorious human in a sport requires a lot of work in his professional game. On one hand, some people, the ability which came naturally is the key to be successful in a sport field because it makes a confident person. Self confidence is a main motive of a sports person. Although athletes know about the rules and regulations of a play, they need to be confident to become a victorious sportsman. For instance, In the Olympics, Which is the most eminent race platform for international athletes, players play with a confidence which built by themselves because of their original strength. Obtain, who is the champion for a decade, has a strength. In addition, Tough competition is given by a player when he has a natural capability. Tough trial is a way to win the moat of matches in a sport, but it is not possible to all. To illustrate, athletes, who gives a neck to neck competition, he rules the sports field. Hence, many believe these skills come from nature. On the other hand, others say, developing the techniques of the sport by working on his game as well as repeating the task to overcome the mistakes is crucial to become a king in sports. Even though learning from mistakes is crucial, a person has to work on the mistakes in order to make his game sharper than others. For example, Virat Kohli, who is the world number one player in the cricket, he used to practice often with commitment to remove his mistakes. Hence he became a great cricketer. Similarly, most of them say learn over mistakes and work hard to develop the game will lead the to become a great sportsman To conclude, I believe that developing their game with practice and work hard to make them a victorious sports person. However, some say that to be a successful sportsman, he has to maintain natural ability which leads to develop their confidence and tough competition skills while others say that practicing is a way to overcome mistakes
Nowadays,
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sport
is the most entertainment providing activity
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because
the inhabitants indulge in it
as well
as everyone can gain strong health. Few
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think
that natural strength
is required
to win in
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sport
while others say that working
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hard
as well
as practicing in the nets can bring success. In my opinion, to
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become
a victorious human in a
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sport
requires
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a lot of
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work
in his professional game.

On one hand,
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some
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people
, the ability which came
naturally
is the key to be successful in a
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sport
field
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because
it
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makes
a confident
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person
.
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Self confidence
is a main motive of a
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sports
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person
. Although athletes know about the
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rules
and regulations of a play, they need to be confident to
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become
a victorious sportsman.
For instance
, In the Olympics, Which is the most eminent race platform for international athletes, players play with a confidence which built by themselves
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because
of their original strength. Obtain, who is the champion for a decade, has a strength.
In addition
, Tough competition is
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given
by a player when he has a natural capability. Tough trial is a way to win the moat of matches in a
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sport
,
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but
it is not possible to all. To illustrate, athletes, who gives a neck to neck competition, he
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rules
the
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sports
field.
Hence
,
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many
believe these
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skills
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come
from nature.

On the
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other
hand, others say, developing the techniques of the
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sport
by working on his game
as well
as repeating the task to overcome the
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mistakes
is crucial to
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become
a king in
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sports
.
Even though
learning from
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mistakes
is crucial, a
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person
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has to
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work
on the
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mistakes
in order to
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make
his game sharper than others.
For example
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Kohli
, who is the world number one player in the cricket, he
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used
to practice
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often
with commitment to remove his
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mistakes
.
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Hence
he became a great cricketer.
Similarly
, most of them say learn over
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mistakes
and
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work
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hard
to develop the game will lead the to
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become
a great sportsman

To conclude
, I believe that developing their game with practice and
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work
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hard
to
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make
them a victorious
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sports
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person
.
However
,
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some
say that to be a successful sportsman, he
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has to
maintain natural ability which leads to develop their confidence and tough competition
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skills
while others say that practicing is a way to overcome
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mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
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