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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree. v.3

Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 3
In recent decades, the question of whether or not people should pay taxes has become a topic of discussion. Although some argue that they have the right to keep all the money that they working for, I completely disagree with this view. There are a number of reasons why people should pay taxes to the state. It it evident that in all countries, either developed or developing ones, paying taxes is a civic duty. If a person intentionally avoids paying taxes, chances are he would be fined, or even imprisoned as this acting is deemed illegal. In addition, social welfare that people has been receiving mostly comes from tax revenue. For instance, in order to build public transportation systems that service for citizens, a great deal of money would be required, which inevitably needs the contribution of all individuals. It is also clear that imposing taxes is beneficial to not only individuals, but also society as a whole. First, taxes levied on corporations can facilitate environmental protection. For example, excise tax, such as carbon tax, would act as a deterrent for companies in the mining industry, thereby reducing greenhouse gas emissions and the intensification of global warming. Second, paying taxes can make fairer societies. Since people with higher income have the higher tax rates than ones with less, the gap between rich and poor would be narrowed. In conclusion, each individual should pay tax since it is their obligation. By paying a small part of their incomes, taxpayers could contribute to the society.
In recent decades,
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the question of whether
or not
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people
should pay
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taxes
has become a topic of discussion. Although
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some
argue that they have the right to
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keep
all the money that
Did you mean "they're working", "they are working", or "they were working"?
they working
for, I completely disagree with this view.

There are a number of reasons why
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people
should pay
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taxes
to the state.
It seems you either mean "it is", "if it", "it" or there is a comma missing: "it, it".
It it
evident that in all countries, either developed or developing ones,
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paying
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taxes
is a civic duty. If a person
intentionally
avoids
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paying
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taxes
, chances are he would
be fined
, or even imprisoned as this acting
is deemed
illegal.
In addition
, social welfare that
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people
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has
been receiving
mostly
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comes
from
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tax
revenue.
For instance
, in order to build public transportation systems that service for citizens, a great deal of money would
be required
, which
inevitably
needs the contribution of all individuals.

It is
also
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clear
that imposing
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taxes
is beneficial to not
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only
individuals,
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but
also
society as a whole.
First
,
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taxes
levied on corporations can facilitate environmental protection.
For example
, excise
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tax
, such as carbon
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tax
, would act as a deterrent for
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companies
in the mining industry, thereby reducing greenhouse gas emissions and the intensification of global warming. Second,
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paying
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taxes
can
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make
fairer societies. Since
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people
with higher income have the higher
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tax
rates than ones with less, the gap between rich and poor would
be narrowed
.

In conclusion
, each individual should pay
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tax
since it is their obligation. By
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paying
a
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small
part of their incomes, taxpayers could contribute to the society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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