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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.9

Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 9
Lately, the tax payers are wondering where their money goes and they believe that their money is not well invested. As a result, some argue that they should not pay any taxes to the government. I totally agree with this approach and I will explain the reasons why. The aim of the taxes is to contribute economically to the developments of the communities. A significant part of the citizens salary is taken in order to keep parks clean, to build new roads, schools and hospitals. In addition, this wage is used to support people who do not have an income or a place to live. Some public services like the police and the fireman get their support for it. Without this system these services might fail. For example, police cars, defensive equipments and salary come from the tax money. However, although the money of the taxes is essential for these aspects, the tax payers argue that their money is not well invested. Despite of the big amount of fund generated from the taxes, some communities and services do not witness any single improvements or investments. Public sectors like education and health presence a dismiss from the government. These sectors barely survive with the capital provided by the government. Moreover, some presidents spend the tax money to travel and for their personal benefit. Furthermore, people are paying an excessive amount of money in taxes regardless their low salary income. As a consequence, their income after paying taxes is not sufficient to afford their daily expenses. In conclusion, the tax payment should be waived, if the money is not invested in the community. In the future, it is pretty likely that more people become poor because tax payments.
Lately, the
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tax
payers are wondering where their
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money
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goes and
they believe that their
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money
is not well invested.
As a result
,
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some
argue that they should not pay any
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taxes
to the
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government
. I
totally
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agree
with this approach and I will
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explain
the reasons why.

The aim of the
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taxes
is to contribute
economically
to the developments of the communities. A significant part of the
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citizens
salary
is taken
in order to
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keep
parks clean, to build new roads, schools and hospitals.
In addition
, this wage is
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used
to support
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people
who do not have an income or a place to
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live
.
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Some
public services like the police and the fireman
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get
their support for it. Without this system these services might fail.
For example
, police cars, defensive equipments and salary
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come
from the
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tax
money.

However
, although the
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money
of the
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taxes
is essential for these aspects, the
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tax
payers argue that their
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money
is not well invested.
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Despite of
the
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big
amount of fund generated from the
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taxes
,
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some
communities and services do not witness any single improvements or investments. Public sectors like education and health presence
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a dismiss
from the
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government
. These sectors
barely
survive with the capital provided by the
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government
.
Moreover
,
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some
presidents spend the
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tax
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money
to travel and for their personal benefit.
Furthermore
,
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people
are paying an excessive amount of
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money
in
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taxes
regardless their low salary income. As a consequence, their income after paying
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taxes
is not sufficient to afford their daily expenses.

In conclusion
, the
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tax
payment should
be waived
, if the
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money
is not invested in the community. In the future, it is pretty likely that more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
become poor
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because
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tax
payments.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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