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Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? v.4

Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? v. 4
A question concerning employment that many have to face is whether they should pursue their promising career at a major firm or a modest one. On one hand, I am inclined to believe that as an individual works for a company of large scale, he will be given favourable opportunities of advancement. On the other hand, hardly can we deny that it is more feasible to apply at smaller business establishments. To assess the potential advantages of being employed by large corporations, we must bring the amount of income as well as other perks into focus. Assuming a person passed the recruiting process at gigantic organizations such as Apple or Google, he would no longer be concerned about his financial situation. Not only is he able to do his job in a professional office environment, but the first class facilities also cater for virtually all of his needs. In addition, meeting potential investors in both domestic and international ones will open the opportunities for business collaboration. Another benefit is whenever a worker decides to job hop, his resume will be noticed straightforwardly by headhunter of the competitor companies. Although so far, one can readily draw the conclusion that working in gigantic organizations seems to be more attractive, we must put the salient points of the smaller ones into perspective before judging which one is better. Not having as much to lose as big businesses, small-scale businesses will take more risks and are not afraid to allow more creativity, along with freedom, when it comes to decision-making. For instance, workers are under less stress because the goals of the company require less effort to attain. On top of that, seniors of universities are warmly welcomed to gain apprenticeship experience of small businesses, whereas the bigger ones shy away from or even get rid of those students. Taking both sides into consideration, they point me to the conclusion that there are pros and cons to each of the sides. Regardless of the size of the workplace, I truly suppose that it all comes down to personal preferences.
A question concerning employment that
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many
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have to
face is whether they should pursue their promising career at a major firm or a modest one. On one hand, I
am inclined
to believe that as an individual works for a
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company
of large scale, he will be
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given
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favourable
opportunities of advancement.
On the other hand
, hardly can we deny that it is more feasible to apply at smaller
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business
establishments.

To assess the potential advantages of
being employed
by large corporations, we
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must
bring the amount of income
as well
as other perks into focus. Assuming a person passed the recruiting process at gigantic organizations such as Apple or Google, he would no longer
be concerned
about his financial situation. Not
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only
is he able to do his job in a professional office environment,
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but
the
first
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class
facilities
also
cater for
virtually
all of his needs.
In addition
, meeting potential investors in both domestic and international
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ones
will open the opportunities for
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business
collaboration. Another benefit is whenever a worker decides to job hop, his resume will
be noticed
straightforwardly
by headhunter of the competitor
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companies
.

Although
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so
far, one can
readily
draw the conclusion that working in gigantic organizations seems to be more attractive, we
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must
put the salient points of the smaller
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ones
into perspective
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before
judging which one is better. Not having as much to lose as
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big
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businesses
,
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small
-scale
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businesses
will take more
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risks
and are not afraid to
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allow
more creativity, along with freedom, when it
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comes
to decision-making.
For instance
, workers are under less
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stress
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because
the goals of the
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company
require less effort to attain.
On top of that
, seniors of universities are
warmly
welcomed to gain apprenticeship experience of
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small
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businesses
, whereas the bigger
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ones
shy away from or even
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get
rid of those students.

Taking both sides into consideration, they point me to the conclusion that there are pros and cons to each of the sides. Regardless of the size of the workplace, I
truly
suppose that it all
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comes
down to personal preferences.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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