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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 6
Tax is the source from which a nation grows. It is observed that some people believe that the public should keep their hard earned money to themselves. Whereas, other people think that it is their duty to pay tax for the betterment of their country. I totally disagree with the statement and I believe that every individual should pay tax. In countries like India, the majority of people don't pay taxes and don't even bother to think about its importance. They feel that it is only wastage of their money, and also the government will misuse it or use it for their personal expenses. Because of this reason the public prefers not to pay tax. Nevertheless, they forget that the authorities have made strict rules and amendments in the law that whoever does not pay tax has to pay heavy penalties or even have to go to jail. People should not be selfish and believe that it is their moral responsibility to pay tax. Therefore, they should understand with the amount of tax the government will receive, they will give better facilities to the public, provide more services to them to make their lives easier and safer. With the help of tax more and more benefits will be given to the public and the nation will prosper in every way. To conclude, the authorities should decide the minimum amount of tax that needs to be paid so that every individual can pay the tax easily and happily. Hence, instead of hiding money and breaking the laws, every person should come forward and join hands together and promise to pay tax to the government on time.
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Tax
is the source from which a nation grows. It
is observed
that
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some
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people
believe that the
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public
should
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keep
their
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hard earned
money to themselves. Whereas, other
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people
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think
that it is their duty to
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pay
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tax
for the betterment of their country. I
totally
disagree with the statement and I believe that every individual should
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pay
tax.

In countries like India, the majority of
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people
don't
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pay
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taxes
and don't even bother to
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think
about its importance. They feel that it is
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only
wastage of their money, and
also
the
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government
will misuse it or
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use
it for their personal expenses.
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Because
of this reason the
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public
prefers not to
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pay
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tax
.
Nevertheless
, they forget that the authorities have made strict
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rules
and amendments in the law that whoever does not
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pay
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tax
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has to
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pay
heavy penalties or even
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have to
go to jail.

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People
should not be selfish and believe that it is their moral responsibility to
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pay
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tax
.
Therefore
, they should understand with the amount of
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tax
the
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government
will receive, they will give better facilities to the
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public
, provide more services to them to
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make
their
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lives
easier and safer. With the
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help
of
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tax
more and more benefits will be
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given
to the
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public
and the nation will prosper in every way.

To conclude
, the authorities should decide the minimum amount of
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tax
that needs to
be paid
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so
that every individual can
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pay
the
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tax
easily
and
happily
.
Hence
,
instead
of hiding money and breaking the laws, every person should
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come
forward and
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join
hands together and promise to
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pay
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tax
to the
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government
on time.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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