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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 4
Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? There are people living in different countries who often asks themselves 'Why should we give decent part of our salary to the state? '. It could be no clear why taxes are existing but nevertheless they are important for the functioning of the whole nation of each particular country. I think that taxes are a necessary part of our life and without them we could end up in a very bad situation. Some may say 'If we had this money we would be better at managing them than the government! ' But I think it is not true for most of them. Quite a few people in the world have appropriate education for creating and managing long-term plans when we talk about money. Also, when we pay the tax we supporting not only our future, but also the life of the other people too. In my opinion the main reason why we should pay taxes is a availability of public services. For example, public transport, education, medicine etc. All these things can't exist without taking part of a income people of the country. Of course to have all these things working properly government has to do its job at good level. In conclusion, I believe that taxes are important part of the modern world. Without it, any big city couldn't exist today. Also, all of this is true only if the government of the state doing their things right.
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all the money they earn, and should not
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to the state.

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living in
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often
asks themselves 'Why should we give decent
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part
of our salary to the state? '. It could be no
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why
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taxes
are existing
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they are
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important
for the functioning of the whole nation of each particular country.

I
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that
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taxes
are a necessary
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part
of our life and without them we could
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up in a
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situation.

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may say 'If we had this money we would be better at managing them than the
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! '

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I
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it is not true for most of them. Quite a few
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people
in the world have appropriate education for creating and managing long-term plans when we talk about money.
Also
, when we pay the
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tax
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not
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our future,
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also
the life of the other
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too.

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taxes
is
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availability of public services.
For example
, public transport, education, medicine etc. All these things can't exist without taking
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part
of
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a
income
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people
of the country.
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properly
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government
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has to
do its job at
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good
level.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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taxes
are
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important
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part
of the modern world. Without it, any
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city couldn't exist
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today
.
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, all of this is true
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if the
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of the state doing their things right.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 4

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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