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It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent of communication but some people argue that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent of communication but some people argue that it may not be the best place to find information. v. 1
Today, concerns are high about how digital age changes the way of communication. Some argue that the internet is not a reliable source of finding information. Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision. It is true that, it has developed communication process. Therefore, it makes an instant connection throughout the world. For instance, social media is the best method to interact with people, and this is associated with the internet. Furthermore, it has changed the way people conduct business, and the manner we conduct our personal and social lives. In fact, we can text, SMS and email through a link to anyone all over the world. On the other hand, as it brings lots of benefits of communication, although, the online network is not a reliable source to get news. However, all the data we get through online are not always true, and sometimes it leads people wrong way. For example, there are fraud people out there who try to mislead people by providing false data. Additionally, in our daily life we involve with many activities so that, we need to collect information, but not all the news is available online. Such as, when we need to take prosecution against someone, we have to talk to someone who knows legislation and works for that. It's not possible to get idea from online. In conclusion, whenever we need to communicate with people we can do it in a second using internet. In my opinion, this not only helps people to connect with each other, but also provides us the information whenever we need it. Sometimes it is authorised.
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, concerns are high about how digital age
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changes
the way of communication.
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Some
argue that the internet is not a reliable source of finding information.
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Let
us examine both views
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before
reaching a concrete decision. It is true that, it has developed communication process.
Therefore
, it
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makes
an instant connection throughout the world.
For instance
, social media is the best method to interact with
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people
, and this
is associated
with the internet.
Furthermore
, it has
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changed
the way
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people
conduct business, and the manner we conduct our personal and social
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lives
. In fact, we can text, SMS and email through a link to anyone all over the world.

On the other hand
, as it brings lots of benefits of communication, although, the online network is not a reliable source to
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get
news.
However
, all the data we
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get
through online are not always true, and
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sometimes
it leads
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people
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wrong
way.
For example
, there are fraud
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people
out there who try to mislead
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people
by providing false data.
Additionally
, in our daily life we involve with
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many
activities
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so
that, we
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need
to collect information,
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but
not all the news is available online. Such as, when we
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need
to take prosecution against someone, we
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have to
talk to someone who knows legislation and works for that. It's not possible to
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get
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idea
from online.

In conclusion
, whenever we
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need
to communicate with
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people
we can do it in a second using internet. In my opinion, this not
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only
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helps
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people
to connect with each other,
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but
also
provides us the information whenever we
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need
it.
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Sometimes
it is
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authorised
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent of communication but some people argue that it may not be the best place to find information. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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