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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.10

Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 10
Nowadays, many people are working very hard to get an extra money to cope with life requirements. While some people think that we should not pay taxes in the country, others argue it mandatory. I agree to some extent with not paying taxes to the country as the government to develop the country to ensure we have a convenient life. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion. To begin with, there are several reasons why people are not willing to pay taxes. Firstly, people are working for long hours these days to get extra income to buy life necessities. As the life is becoming more difficult, people need to ensure they have the essential facilities such as house and car. For example, the majority of the people are saving their income to buy the dream house for their families. Secondly, life is full of surprises that could appear out of the moon such as illness. Therefore, they will use the extra money they saved to go through these events. Furthermore, the governments use the collected taxes to support the country. To commence with, the country development totally depends on the government, and if the states do not have the money for these the life will be impacted. For instance, the governments collect the taxes to enhance the transportation system and health program. Moreover, the governments need to maintain the country economically. Accordingly, without the money collected from the taxes they will not be able to push cache in the market and save the local currency. To sum up, whatever the reasons are, both the people and the government need the money either for personal development or country services enhancement. I profoundly believe that with the money collected from taxes the states will build better country in terms of services and economy, however, the taxes should be reasonable so the people could save some money for their life requirements.
Nowadays,
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many
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people
are working
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very
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hard
to
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get
an extra
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money
to cope with
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life
requirements. While
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some
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people
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think
that we should not pay
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taxes
in the
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country
, others argue it mandatory. I
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agree
to
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some
extent with not paying
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taxes
to the
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country
as the
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government
to develop the
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country
to ensure we have a convenient
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life
. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons why
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people
are not willing to pay
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taxes
.
Firstly
,
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people
are working for long hours these days to
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get
extra income to
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buy
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life
necessities. As the
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life
is becoming more difficult,
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people
need to ensure they have the essential facilities such as
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house
and car.
For example
, the majority of the
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people
are saving their income to
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buy
the dream
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house
for their families.
Secondly
,
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life
is full of surprises that could appear out of the moon such as illness.
Therefore
, they will
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use
the extra
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money
they saved to go through these
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events
.

Furthermore
, the
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governments
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use
the collected
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taxes
to support the
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country
. To commence with, the
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country
development
totally
depends on the
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government
, and if the states do not have the
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money
for these the
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life
will
be impacted
.
For instance
, the
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governments
collect the
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taxes
to enhance the transportation system and health program.
Moreover
, the
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governments
need to maintain the
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country
economically
.
Accordingly
, without the
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money
collected from the
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taxes
they will not be able to push cache in the market and save the local currency.

To sum up, whatever the reasons are, both the
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people
and the
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government
need the
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money
either for personal development or
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country
services enhancement. I
profoundly
believe that with the
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money
collected from
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taxes
the states will build better
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country
in terms of services and economy,
however
, the
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taxes
should be reasonable
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so
the
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people
could save
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some
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money
for their
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life
requirements.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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