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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 101 v.55

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 101 v. 55
In today's era, most of the people want to visit a various part of the world, having a natural beauty and a varied atmosphere. The essay will discuss about the positive and negative points for those who visits such places. To begin with, one of the important point is that many people like to explore a new thing which consist of a number of challenges in that person have to survive. They will think that by doing this they learn a skill for which they never think about to learn. For example, tourists who travel to Sahara desert learn that how to survive if you have not provided basic things such as, water and food. Moreover, some people wish to visit the entire world and a particular, they go to that place and observe the natural beauty of that place and how people live there and what type of work they were doing, gets the idea about all these things. Thus, after visiting one such places should develop a skill and feel happy. On the other hand, there are some negative points are also there that visitors have to deal with. Firstly, these places having a different temperature and also sudden changes may happen. So, if you want some emergency medical help then, it would be very difficult to get that in time. For instance, if you are at the Antartic, suddenly you have a pain in your heart, you need to consult a doctor then to reach to hospital in short time is not possible for you as such places not having nearby any hospital or a doctor. Even from such places it would be difficult to make contact with other people. In conclusion, while after visiting such places one should explore a new skill, but also have to suffer if they need some help like medical. Government should help such tourist by starting a camp at such places.
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points for those who visits such places.

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survive. They will
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learn that how to survive if you have not provided basic things such as, water and food.
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and observe the natural beauty of that
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there and what type of work they were doing,
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and feel happy.

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emergency medical
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that in time.
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not having nearby any hospital or a doctor. Even from such
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it would be difficult to
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contact with other
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, while after visiting such
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like medical.
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Government
should
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such tourist by starting a camp at such
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8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 101 v. 55

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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