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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v.1

Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 1
People work hard and earn money which ideally they would like to retain for themselves. However, a significant portion of this usually has to be given to the state. In my view, it is right that people pay their fair share of taxes. Money is everything in today’s livelihoods. This is because money is used to buy all the necessities such as food, water, and shelter. Money is also used to help a family’s children in the form of school fees and other activities. In addition to this, people do not only need money to cater for their necessities, but also for future investments. The more that people have to invest, the more they believe they can accumulate in the long term. As a result, many are reluctant to lose some of their income through the deduction of tax. Nevertheless, citizens should be obliged to pay taxes to the government for a number of reasons. They should accept that the taxes they pay help the government offer them the public services all over the country. These public services are things such as the construction of roads, bridges, public hospitals, parks and other public services. The same tax money helps the country’s economy to be stable. Through taxes, the government can pay off its debts. In short, tax money is a way of ensuring that people have comfortable livelihoods. In conclusion, even though many people think that they should not pay taxes, that money is useful to the stability of any country. Therefore, people should not avoid paying taxes as it may affect the country’s economy and services that it provides
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People
work
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hard
and earn
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money
which
ideally
they would like to retain for themselves.
However
, a significant portion of this
usually
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has to
be
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given
to the state. In my view, it is right that
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people
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pay
their
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fair
share of taxes.

Money is everything in
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today
’s livelihoods. This is
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because
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money
is
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used
to
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buy
all the necessities such as food, water, and shelter.
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Money
is
also
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used
to
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help
a family’s children in the form of school fees and other activities.
In addition
to this,
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people
do not
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only
need
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money
to cater for their necessities,
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but
also
for future investments. The more that
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people
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have to
invest, the more they believe they can accumulate in the long term.
As a result
,
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many
are reluctant to lose
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some
of their income through the deduction of tax.

Nevertheless
, citizens should
be obliged
to
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pay
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taxes
to the
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government
for a number of reasons. They should accept that the
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taxes
they
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pay
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help
the
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government
offer them the
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public
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services
all over the
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country
. These
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public
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services
are things such as the construction of roads, bridges,
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public
hospitals, parks and other
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public
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services
. The same
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tax
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money
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helps
the
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country’s
economy to be stable. Through
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taxes
, the
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government
can
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pay
off its debts. In short,
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tax
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money
is a way of ensuring that
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people
have comfortable livelihoods.

In conclusion
,
even though
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many
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people
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think
that they should not
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pay
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taxes
, that
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money
is useful to the stability of any
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country
.
Therefore
,
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people
should not avoid paying
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taxes
as it may affect the
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country’s
economy and
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services
that it provides
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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