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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. v. 1
It is generally accepted by some people that there should be predetermined penalty for every form of unlawful act, while others disagree that the situation of each offence and the reason for performing the act should be considered when applying necessary discipline. In my opinion, there should be established retribution for each illegal act with allowance for exceptions as this will largely reduce crime rate and promote sanity in every community. Some believe that the absence of fix consequence for every offence has largely contributed to the global increase in crime rate. This was supported by the global crime report recently released by Smart Inc. – a US based research firm. The report stated that most of the atrocity committed in the last two decades have no moral justification whatsoever. It further asserted that series of investigations demonstrated that some of the convicted criminals confessed that they were motivated to commit these crimes because of the possibility of escaping the right judgement. On the other hand, another school of thought is of the opinion that the motive behind the act should not be completely separated from the act. This is because, sometimes, the unlawful acts are perpetrated when they are genuinely indisposed to do so. For instance, during a monthly radio crime program in Ghana, a man narrated his ordeal when he was attacked by thieves. He said these men had gained access to his compound with one of them already in his sitting room. Fortunately, while the others were trying to enter, the police men came around after they had been informed and this made the armed men to leave with the exception of one who he eventually killed. Although, he was condemned of murder, he was discharged and acquitted because the police attested to his innocence. In conclusion, I believe that there should be solid charge for every criminal act while provisions are given for certain acts proven beyond reasonable doubt of honesty.
It is
generally
accepted
by
some
people
that there should
be predetermined
penalty for every form of unlawful
act
, while others disagree that the situation of each
offence
and the reason for performing the
act
should
be considered
when applying necessary discipline. In my opinion, there should
be established
retribution for each illegal
act
with allowance for exceptions as this will
largely
reduce
crime
rate and promote sanity in every community.

Some
believe that the absence of
fix
consequence for every
offence
has
largely
contributed to the global increase in
crime
rate. This
was supported
by the global
crime
report recently released by Smart Inc.
a US based research firm. The report stated that most of the atrocity committed in the last two decades have no moral justification whatsoever. It
further
asserted that series of investigations demonstrated that
some of the
convicted criminals confessed that they
were motivated
to commit these
crimes
because
of the possibility of escaping the right judgement.

On the other hand
, another school of
thought
is of the opinion that the motive behind the
act
should not be completely separated from the
act
. This is
because
,
sometimes
, the unlawful
acts
are perpetrated
when they are
genuinely
indisposed to do
so
.
For instance
, during a monthly radio
crime
program in Ghana, a
man
narrated his ordeal when he
was attacked
by thieves. He said these
men
had gained access to his compound with one of them already in his sitting room.
Fortunately
, while the others were trying to enter, the police
men
came around after they had
been informed
and this made the armed
men
to
leave
with the exception of
one who he
eventually
killed. Although, he
was condemned
of murder, he
was discharged
and acquitted
because
the police attested to his innocence.

In conclusion
, I believe that there should be solid charge for every criminal
act
while provisions are
given
for certain
acts
proven beyond reasonable doubt of honesty.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. v. 1

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