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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punish v.6

Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punish v. 6
Happiness is the main life goal for the majority of the Earth’s population. It may be difficult to define what happiness truly is since it depends on a variety of factors, but it is a highly valued human emotion that is found in grateful, secure, and peaceful individuals. One of the main reasons why happiness is hard to define is its complexity. Happiness differs from one person to another, and it is hard to understand why this happens. Perhaps the most plausible explanation of this difference is the environment in which individuals were raised or the influence of their parents. Additionally, how each individual perceives the world is unique, thus, their requirements to be happy are also different. For instance, some people are materialistic, while others are spiritual and this contributes to the way they find their own happiness. Generally, people who are happy have one thing in common, a sense of gratitude and satisfaction with the lives they lead. Various factors contribute to one’s happiness, which mainly depend on the personality of the individual. Some people are happy when they achieve job satisfaction. In other words, when they perform a skill they are good at and they feel that their efforts are being appreciated, they feel a deep sense of fulfilment, thus, making them happy. On the other hand, others link happiness to their personal lives instead of their working life. For example, if someone has a supportive family or is in a fulfilling relationship, then they feel happy and overjoyed. Moreover, some people find happiness when they help others, financially or emotionally, since this makes them feel useful and needed. In conclusion, happiness is a human emotion that has always been sought after for ages. Humans try their best and work hard in life in order to accomplish certain goals that might make them happy.
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Happiness
is the main life goal for the majority of the Earth’s population. It may be difficult to define what
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happiness
truly
is since it depends on a variety of factors,
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but
it is a
highly
valued human emotion that
is found
in grateful, secure, and peaceful individuals.

One of the main reasons why
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happiness
is
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hard
to define is its complexity.
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Happiness
differs from one person to another, and it is
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hard
to understand why this happens. Perhaps the most plausible explanation of this difference is the environment in which individuals
were raised
or the influence of their parents.
Additionally
, how each individual perceives the world is unique,
thus
, their requirements to be
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happy
are
also
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different
.
For instance
,
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some
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people
are materialistic, while others are spiritual and this contributes to the way they find their
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own
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happiness
.
Generally
,
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people
who are
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happy
have one thing in common, a sense of gratitude and satisfaction with the
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lives
they lead.

Various factors contribute to one’s
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happiness
, which
mainly
depend on the personality of the individual.
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Some
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people
are
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happy
when they achieve job satisfaction. In
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other
words, when they perform a
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skill
they are
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good
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at and
they
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feel
that their efforts are
being appreciated
, they
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feel
a deep sense of
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fulfilment
,
thus
, making them
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happy
. On the
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other
hand, others link
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happiness
to their personal
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lives
instead
of their working life.
For example
, if someone has a supportive family or is in a fulfilling relationship, then they
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feel
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happy
and overjoyed.
Moreover
,
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some
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people
find
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happiness
when they
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help
others,
financially
or
emotionally
, since this
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makes
them
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feel
useful and needed.

In conclusion
,
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happiness
is a human emotion that has always
been sought
after for ages. Humans try their best and work
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hard
in life in order to accomplish certain goals that might
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make
them
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happy
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punish v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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