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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punish v.18

Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punish v. 18
Nowadays, crimes increased with changing time. such as argued that all people should punished with decided fixture who felt in same crime. Whilst other disagree. This essay agrees that a same judgement for such type of crimes. This essay discuss both points of views. First and foremost, It is clear that crime will increase if It will neglect. Criminal should be punished same prices so that all folk will thought first before do something which is illegal. It is therefore agreed that fixed penalty can reduce crime rate as well as illegal work. For instance, normal man was attempted a murder to someone who should punished likewise criminal judge. However, many disagree and feel that some factors should consider before penance someone. Like motivation for crime. This People harmless for society. That people have not total fault in misdeed because of they were misguided by other. Despite this, If someone who attracted toward motivation speech for crime that people danger in future for society so that factors cannot be consider for punishment for same crimes. For example, teenager was raped girl then teenager should be treat as other older people. So that in future, all teenager have an example of punishment for do something criminal activities. Most important thing is how to decrease a crime level in all ages. This problem is solve by fixed punishment, but some still feel that it is not correct way. To pen down, i would like to tell you that fixed punishment could reduced level of crime in all ages.
Nowadays,
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crimes
increased with changing time.
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such
as argued that all
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people
should
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punished
with decided fixture who felt in same
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crime
. Whilst other disagree. This essay
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agrees
that a same judgement for such type of
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crimes
.
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This essay discuss
both points of views.

First
and foremost, It is
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clear
that
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crime
will increase if It will neglect. Criminal should
be punished
same prices
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so
that all folk will
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thought
first
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before
do something which is illegal. It is
therefore
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agreed
that
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fixed
penalty can
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reduce
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crime
rate
as well
as illegal work.
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, normal
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man
was attempted
a murder to someone who should punished
likewise
criminal judge.

However
,
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many
disagree and feel that
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some
factors should consider
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before
penance someone. Like motivation for
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crime
. This
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People
harmless for society. That
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people
have not total fault in misdeed
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because of they
were misguided
by other. Despite this, If someone who attracted toward motivation speech for
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crime
that
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people
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danger
in future for society
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so
that factors cannot be
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consider
for
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punishment
for same
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crimes
.
For example
,
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teenager
was raped
girl then
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teenager
should be
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treat
as other older
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people
.
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So
that
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in future
, all
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teenager
have an example of
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punishment
for do something criminal activities.

Most
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important
thing is how to decrease a
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crime
level in all ages. This problem is
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solve
by
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fixed
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punishment
,
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but
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some
still
feel that it is not
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correct
way. To pen down,
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i
would like to
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tell
you that
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fixed
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punishment
could
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reduced
level of
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crime
in all ages.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punish v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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