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Advertising has become part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising has a positive impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Advertising has become part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising has a positive impact on our lives. v. 1
It is a well-known saying if you want to analyse someone’s character you must observe their gathering. It is often suggested that it’s good to have friends who have same viewpoint and mindset as yours because they make a special bond. Others believe friends with different thoughts invoke productive conversations. I believe friends with dissimilar opinion play a vital role in your life and are more important. To embark on, there are umpteen factors why it is valuable to have friends with similar concepts. Usually people with common ideas have a good understanding and bonding among them as they feel less hesitated, more secure and comfortable to share their problems, mistakes, fears and emotional feelings with the friends who have the same views. There are hardly any situations where they have any arguments thus leading to strong and long lasting friendship. For instance, as per Harvard business Review, people who have identical mindset tend to recover faster from any kind of stress or anxiety when they share their problems with one another. However, similar thoughts, lack rational thinking. On the other hand, it is observed that having a disagreement among friends is good because differences of opinion are necessary to showcase the other perspective of situations. Different mentality also instigates constructive criticism which leads to creative ideas and improve strategy and options. Brainstorming of all ideas is necessary before reaching to conclusions and decisions. For example, if all the friends of a smoker are smokers, he will never get to hear about the harmful consequences of smoking. On the other hand, if he has at least a few non-smokers among his friends, they will constantly advise him to quit smoking. Furthermore, it is confirmed by the Institute of clinical psychology, University of Karachi that friends with unlike minds can trigger growth, creativity and productivity provided that they guides correctly, advise sincerely and are not diplomatic. In conclusion, although it is evident that like-minded friends offer an amazing company where as those who differ can offer better perspective.
It is a well-known saying if you want to
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analyse
someone’s character you
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must
observe their gathering. It is
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often
suggested that it’s
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good
to have
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friends
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who
have same viewpoint and mindset as yours
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because
they
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make
a special bond. Others believe
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friends
with
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different
thoughts invoke productive conversations. I believe
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friends
with dissimilar opinion play a vital role in your life and are more
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important
.

To embark on, there are umpteen factors why it is valuable to have
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friends
with similar concepts.
Usually
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people
with common
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ideas
have a
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good
understanding and bonding among them as they feel less hesitated, more secure and comfortable to share their problems, mistakes, fears and emotional feelings with the
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friends
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who
have the same views. There are hardly any situations where they have any arguments
thus
leading to strong and
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long lasting
friendship.
For instance
, as per Harvard business Review,
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people
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who
have identical mindset tend to recover faster from any kind of
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stress
or anxiety when they share their problems with one another.
However
, similar thoughts, lack rational thinking.

On the
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other
hand, it
is observed
that having a disagreement among
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friends
is
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good
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because
differences of opinion are necessary to showcase the
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other
perspective of situations.
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Different
mentality
also
instigates constructive criticism which leads to creative
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ideas
and
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improve
strategy and options. Brainstorming of all
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ideas
is necessary
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before
reaching to conclusions and decisions.
For example
, if all the
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friends
of a smoker are smokers, he will never
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get
to hear about the harmful consequences of smoking. On the
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other
hand, if he has at least a few non-smokers among his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
, they will
constantly
advise him to quit smoking.
Furthermore
, it
is confirmed
by the Institute of clinical psychology, University of Karachi that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
with unlike minds can trigger growth, creativity and productivity provided that they
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guides
correctly
, advise
sincerely
and are not diplomatic.

In conclusion
, although it is evident that like-minded
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friends
offer an amazing
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company
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where as
those
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who
differ can offer better perspective.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Advertising has become part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising has a positive impact on our lives. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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