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Some people believe that the public health will be worse in the future than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Some people believe that the public health will be worse in the future than now. with this statement? v. 1
There has been a debatable issue regarding human well-being. It is believed by some that people will be less healthy in the future than at present. I completely agree that in the future, human physical health will worsen as a result of several factors. This essay will discuss the factors contributing to the issue. Poor diets is one of the main causes of people being less healthy and it is believed that people will have worse food in the future. Most of them will prefer fast foods which contain less good nutrients like proteins but have a huge amount of bad nutrients such as fats. This poor habit can lead to several chronic diseases such as heart attack and diabetes. For instance, the WHO recently cited that junk foods, even though consumed rarely, can cause severe heart problem and therefore should be eliminated completely from human's daily diets. In addition, it also predicted that fast food will gain more popularity in the near future, causing more and more health related issues. In addition, lack of physical movements contributes to the falling health people. Humans are getting busier day by day and hardly have time to do physical activities which is essential to get rid of dangerous chemicals in their body. As a result, the toxic substances stay inside the body and inevitably will cause health problems such as obesity. Office employees are the evident example of this. They spend most of their time sitting in front of computer screens and only move during lunch time or when going to the restroom. Moreover, CNN recently reported that 8 out of 10 computer programmers are either obese or diabetic due to their lack of exercises. In conclusion, this essay supports that future human health will be worse than today because more unhealthy diet will be a huge part of future human's life and less physical activity will be done due to busier lifestyle.
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human
well-being. It
is believed
by
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that
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people
will be
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less
healthy in the
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future
than at present. I completely
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agree
that in the
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future
,
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human
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physical
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health
will worsen
as a result
of several factors. This essay will discuss the factors contributing to the issue.

Poor diets is one of the main causes of
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people
being
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less
healthy and it
is believed
that
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people
will have worse
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food
in the
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future
. Most of them will prefer
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fast
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foods
which contain
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less
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good
nutrients like proteins
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have


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a
huge amount of
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bad
nutrients such as fats. This poor habit can lead to several chronic diseases such as heart attack and diabetes.
For instance
, the WHO recently cited that junk
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foods
,
even though
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consumed rarely
, can cause severe heart problem and
therefore
should
be eliminated
completely from human's daily diets.
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, it
also
predicted that
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fast
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food
will gain more popularity in the near
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future
, causing more and more
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health
related issues.

In addition
, lack of
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physical
movements contributes to the falling
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health
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people
.
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Humans
are getting busier day by day and hardly have time to do
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physical
activities which is essential to
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get
rid of
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dangerous
chemicals in their body.
As a result
, the toxic substances stay inside the body and
inevitably
will cause
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health
problems such as obesity. Office employees are the evident example of this. They spend most of their time sitting in front of computer screens and
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only
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move
during
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lunch time
or when going to the restroom.
Moreover
, CNN recently reported that 8 out of 10 computer programmers are either obese or diabetic due to their lack of exercises.

In conclusion
, this essay supports that
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future
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human
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health
will be worse than
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today
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because
more unhealthy diet will be a huge part of
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future
human's life and
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less
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physical
activity will
be done
due to busier lifestyle.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the public health will be worse in the future than now. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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