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The behavior of students in class is becoming worse and worse. What has led to this situation? What can be done to solve it? v.1

The behavior of students in class is becoming worse and worse. What has led to this situation? What can be done to solve it? v. 1
The poor way in which pupils conduct themselves in class is a real issue for teachers today. This trend has been brought about by old-fashioned teaching methods, and class size, which both need to be individually addressed. Out-of-date teaching techniques are one factor responsible for disruptive behaviours in classrooms. Young people today have grown up using technology like smart phones and tablets, which provide information at the touch of a button. In contrast, many teachers deliver lessons using a board and a pen, which results in students becoming bored and, consequently, disorderly. Schools have to invest money in the purchase of up-to-date technological equipment, and re-train teachers to be able to teach content in a way that is more engaging to pupils. If pupils are interested in the lesson content, they will be far less likely to cause trouble. Another major cause of class behaviour is class size. There are 32 pupils in the average UK class, and, as a result, it is almost impossible for one teacher to give everybody the individual attention they need. Therefore, children who finish early or are unable to complete a task are liable to start misbehaving due simply to the fact that they have nothing else to do. Moreover, the more pupils in a room, the higher the likelihood that one person will want to gain attention by behaving badly. To solve this issue requires government legislation. Class sizes need to be limited by law to 25 and, in the long term, money should be invested in more schools to reduce overcrowding. In conclusion, bad behaviour in schools often stems from the fact that classrooms that contain too many people and too little modern equipment. Not until schools modernize their teaching techniques and governments build more schools will the issue be fully resolved.
The poor way in which
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pupils
conduct themselves in
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class
is a real issue for
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teachers
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today
. This trend has
been brought
about by
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old
-fashioned teaching methods, and
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class
size, which both need to be
individually
addressed.

Out-of-date teaching techniques are one factor responsible for disruptive
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behaviours
in classrooms. Young
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people
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today
have grown up using technology like smart phones and tablets, which provide information at the touch of a button.
In contrast
,
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many
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teachers
deliver lessons using a board and a pen, which results in students becoming bored and,
consequently
, disorderly.
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Schools
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have to
invest money in the
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purchase
of up-to-date technological equipment, and re-train
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teachers
to be able to teach content in a way
that is
more engaging to
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pupils
. If
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pupils
are interested
in the lesson content, they will be far less likely to cause trouble.

Another major cause of
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class
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behaviour
is
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class
size. There are 32
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pupils
in the average UK
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class
, and,
as a result
, it is almost impossible for one
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teacher
to give everybody the individual attention they need.
Therefore
, children who finish early or are unable to complete a task are liable to
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start
misbehaving due
simply
to the fact that they have nothing else to do.
Moreover
, the more
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pupils
in a room, the higher the likelihood that one person will want to gain attention by behaving
badly
. To solve this issue requires
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government
legislation.
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Class
sizes need to
be limited
by law to 25 and, in the long term, money should
be invested
in more
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schools
to
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reduce
overcrowding.

In conclusion
,
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bad
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behaviour
in
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schools
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often
stems from the fact that classrooms that contain too
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many
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people
and too
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little
modern equipment. Not until
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schools
modernize their teaching techniques and
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governments
build more
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schools
will the issue be
fully
resolved.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The behavior of students in class is becoming worse and worse. What has led to this situation? What can be done to solve it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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