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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.8

Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. v. 8
It is true that some people think that films should just be for entertainment, while others believe that they should inform as well as entertain. I strongly agree with the second view that the film industry should not be simply a source of entertainment. On the one hand, many people watch films solely in order to be entertained. To appeal to audiences, therefore, the film industry usually focuses on the portrayal of scenes of violent action, accompanied by spectacular effects. Some people say that we need such films to provide an escape from the stresses of daily life. Although each film must contain some kind of story, these action movies bombard audiences with the simplistic theme of bad characters– often alien monsters – chasing the heroes for 90 minutes. Certainly, the purpose of such movies, such as ‘Independence Day’ or the ‘Mission Impossible’ series can only be to entertain, since they have no serious message or even factual content. On the other hand, I concur with the view that films should be instructive as well as entertaining. Firstly, historical films like ‘Titanic’ or ‘Schindler’s List’ have some basis in fact for people to learn about the past. The target audience for such serious films is surprisingly large, suggesting that many people want films to tackle these subjects. Secondly, even films about the future can have some educational themes to make audiences think. For example, despite their absurd exaggerations, the ‘Jurassic Park’ movies have probably inspired many youngsters to want to know more about dinosaurs. In conclusion, while films should obviously entertain audiences and hold their attention, their purpose should also be to add to people’s knowledge and understanding of the world.
It is true that
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think
that films should
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just
be for entertainment, while others believe that they should inform
as well
as entertain. I
strongly
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with the second view that the film industry should not be
simply
a source of entertainment.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
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watch
films
solely
in order to
be entertained
. To appeal to
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audiences
,
therefore
, the film industry
usually
focuses on the portrayal of scenes of violent action, accompanied by spectacular effects.
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Some
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people
say that we need such films to provide an escape from the
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stresses
of daily life. Although each film
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must
contain
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some
kind of story, these action movies bombard
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audiences
with the simplistic theme of
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bad
characters–
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often
alien monsters
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chasing the heroes for 90 minutes.
Certainly
, the purpose of such movies, such as ‘Independence Day’ or the ‘Mission Impossible’ series can
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only
be to entertain, since they have no serious message or even factual content.

On the other hand
, I concur with the view that films should be instructive
as well
as entertaining.
Firstly
, historical films like ‘Titanic’ or ‘Schindler’s List’ have
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some
basis in fact for
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people
to learn about the past. The target
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audience
for such serious films is
surprisingly
large, suggesting that
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many
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people
want films to tackle these subjects.
Secondly
, even films about the future can have
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some
educational themes to
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make
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audiences
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think
.
For example
, despite their absurd exaggerations, the ‘Jurassic Park’ movies have
probably
inspired
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many
youngsters to want to know more about dinosaurs.

In conclusion
, while films should
obviously
entertain
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audiences
and hold their attention, their purpose should
also
be to
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add
to
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people’s
knowledge and understanding of the world.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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