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Some people believe that the only purpose of films are entertain But others say films should have educational value Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people believe that the only purpose of films are entertain But others say films should have educational value 1
In today's modern world, scientific researches are developing rapidly. Regardless of the crucial role of these experiments in realizing our world, inevitably there are some disadvantages. In my view, the drawbacks of scientific researches outweigh the positives. This essay refers to some of these pros and cons. To begin with, owing to these investigations, we have been able to explore the world around us. For example, recently scientists have claimed that life has been existed in the moon. Thanks to all these tests, in many cases, the connection between creatures and natural events have been discovered and consequently new phenomenon is being detected. Turning to the other side of the argument, doing scientific experiments cost a lot since a big amount of the budget should be dedicated to buy required equipment. As an example, launching a space shuttle into the space is too costly. Therefore, the government has to sponsor all the trials and errors that might happen while testing. Additionally, scientists are not always honest about their discovery results. Simply put, to get the fund provided by the government or run a lucrative business, specialists might present fake evidences which could not be distinguished by anyone unless you were expert to concord the forgery with the reality. For instance, after marketing a beauty product, its harms are revealed by the news on television. In conclusion, scientific researches could be an asset to human beings to notice the world and its features, but it is not feasible to ignore the high cost of doing various tests. Experiments could be beneficial if private companies support scientists’ efforts.
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,
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scientific
researches are developing
rapidly
. Regardless of the crucial role of these experiments in realizing our
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world
,
inevitably
there are
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some
disadvantages. In my view, the drawbacks of
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scientific
researches outweigh the positives. This essay refers to
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some
of these pros and cons.

To
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begin
with, owing to these investigations, we have been able to explore the
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world
around us.
For example
, recently scientists have claimed that life has
been existed
in the moon. Thanks to all these
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tests
, in
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many
cases, the
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connection between
creatures and natural
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events
have
been discovered
and
consequently
new phenomenon is
being detected
.

Turning to the other side of the argument, doing
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scientific
experiments cost a lot since a
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big
amount of the budget should
be dedicated
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
required equipment. As an example, launching a space shuttle into the space is too costly.
Therefore
, the
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government
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has to
sponsor all the trials and errors that might happen while testing.

Additionally
, scientists are not always honest about their discovery results.
Simply
put, to
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get
the fund provided by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
or run a lucrative business, specialists might present fake evidences which could not
be distinguished
by anyone unless you were expert to concord the forgery with the reality.
For instance
, after marketing a beauty product, its harms
are revealed
by the news on television.

In conclusion
,
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scientific
researches could be an asset to human beings to notice the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
and its features,
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but
it is not feasible to
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ignore
the high cost of doing various
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tests
. Experiments could be beneficial if private
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companies
support scientists’ efforts.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the only purpose of films are entertain But others say films should have educational value 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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