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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement One quality that a successful leader must have is to make decisions quickly when a leader takes too much time to make decisions he will be seen as inefficient to the people he leads v.1

One quality that a successful leader must have is to make decisions quickly when a leader takes too much time to make decisions he will be seen as inefficient to the people he leads v. 1
It is believed that with the advancement of malls and shopping centres, the local shop business is impacted, as people / consumers are more inclined to the local store in malls than in local shops in their areas. I believe every new change comes with advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, large shopping centres and malls provide one-stop shopping for the customers. There are a huge variety of shops, for instance, clothes, shoes, bags, groceries, furniture to name a few. All these are available under one roof. Thus, it becomes easy for people to buy / shop for everything they need at same place. Earlier, when such places did not exist, it was common for consumers to return home, forgetting to buy certain things they wanted. Furthermore, it was difficult to go to multiple shops at different places for a trip. Hence, malls and shopping centres have proven to be time-savers and very convenient for the customers. On the other hand, there are certain disadvantages associated with it. The small local shopkeepers are losing their business and that is impacting their families. It is also bad for economic growth. For many, these shops are there from generations and they are probably not skilled enough to take up some other occupation. Additionally, many local shops sell products that portray the culture and tradition of the country, which is being lost with the development of malls. To conclude, I believe malls are helpful and provide a good place for shopping and entertainment. However, the market should be able to accommodate local shop owners as well and people should not abandon them completely. It is essential to let local stores survive alongside malls for maintaining economic balance in the society.
It
is believed
that with the advancement of
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malls
and
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shopping
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centres
, the
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local
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shop
business
is impacted
, as
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people
/ consumers are more inclined to the
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local
store in
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malls
than in
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local
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shops
in their areas. I believe every new
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change
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comes
with advantages and disadvantages.

On the one hand, large
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shopping
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centres
and
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malls
provide one-
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stop
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shopping
for the customers. There are a huge variety of
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shops
,
for instance
, clothes, shoes, bags, groceries, furniture to name a few. All these are available under one roof.
Thus
, it becomes easy for
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people
to
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buy
/
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shop
for everything they need at same
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place
. Earlier, when such
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places
did not exist, it was common for consumers to return home, forgetting to
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buy
certain things they wanted.
Furthermore
, it was difficult to go to multiple
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shops
at
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different
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places
for a trip.
Hence
,
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malls
and
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shopping
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centres
have proven to be time-savers and
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very
convenient for the customers.

On the other hand
, there are certain disadvantages associated with it. The
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small
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local
shopkeepers are losing their business and
that is
impacting their families. It is
also
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bad
for economic growth. For
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many
, these
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shops
are there from
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
generations and
they are
probably
not skilled
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enough
to take up
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some
other occupation.
Additionally
,
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many
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local
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shops
sell products that portray the culture and tradition of the country, which is
being lost
with the development of malls.

To conclude
, I believe
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malls
are helpful and provide a
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good
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place
for
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shopping
and entertainment.
However
, the market should be able to accommodate
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local
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shop
owners
as well
and
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people
should not abandon them completely. It is essential to
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let
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local
stores survive alongside
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malls
for maintaining economic balance in the society.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay One quality that a successful leader must have is to make decisions quickly when a leader takes too much time to make decisions he will be seen as inefficient to the people he leads v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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