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Stress related illness are becoming increasingly popular. Causes and solutions v.1

Stress related illness are becoming increasingly popular. Causes and solutions v. 1
Stress has become a part and parcel of our lives. In today’s world more and more people are getting sick due to stress. This essay will discuss the two main causes of stress related illnesses such as increasing work pressure and health issues. This essay also suggests the s work-life balance and healthy lifestyle as solutions to stress related illnesses. Some people are forced to work longer hours these days in order to complete their work in time. In this competitive world, many people put themselves under unfavourable conditions which in turn results in mental pressure. Most people sit and work on their computers for longer hours in many corporate settings which can lead to obesity and other health issues. For instance, many multinational companies utilize their employees and assign multiple projects which has to be sorted out in a comparatively limited time frame. Thus these tensions causes physical and mental distress to their workers. Managing a good work life balance and a healthy life style can solve majority of the above mentioned issues. Unbalanced work schedule and skipping meals just to work need to be changed. people should understand that they need to take regular breaks to avoid fatigue and reduce working excessive hours in a stretch. At the same time, eating a healthy diet in a timely manner and regular exercise can be a practical solution for stress related sickness. For example, spending more time with family and friends and planning errands with them can be considerably refreshing. Therefore, in order to reduce job associated stress one should have a balanced ratio of work, food, exercise, recreation and hobbies. In a nutshell, in today’s busy world more people are getting unhealthy at an alarming rate due to stress. This essay discussed that how stress is caused by a high work load and suggests effective remedies such as work-life balance and healthy lifestyle.
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lives
. In
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today
’s world more and more
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people
are getting sick due to
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stress
. This essay will discuss the two main causes of
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stress
related illnesses such as increasing
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work
pressure and health issues. This essay
also
suggests the s work-life balance and
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healthy
lifestyle as solutions to
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stress
related illnesses.

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Some
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people
are forced
to
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longer hours these days in order to complete their
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work
in
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time
. In this competitive world,
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many
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people
put themselves under
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unfavourable
conditions which in turn results in mental pressure. Most
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people
sit and
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work
on their computers for longer hours in
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many
corporate settings which can lead to obesity and other health issues.
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,
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multinational
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companies
utilize their employees and assign multiple projects which
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has to
be sorted
out in a
comparatively
limited
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time
frame.
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these tensions causes physical and mental distress to their workers.

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good
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work life
balance and a
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life style can solve
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majority of
the above mentioned issues. Unbalanced
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work
schedule and skipping meals
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just
to
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work
need to be
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people
should understand that they need to take regular breaks to avoid fatigue and
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reduce
working excessive hours in a stretch. At the same
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time
, eating a
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healthy
diet in a timely manner and regular exercise can be a practical solution for
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stress
related sickness.
For example
, spending more
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time
with family and friends and planning errands with them can be
considerably
refreshing.
Therefore
, in order to
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reduce
job associated
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stress
one should have a balanced ratio of
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work
, food, exercise, recreation and hobbies.

In a nutshell, in
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today
’s busy world more
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people
are getting unhealthy at an alarming rate due to
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stress
. This essay discussed that how
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stress
is caused
by a high
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work
load and suggests effective remedies such as work-life balance and
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healthy
lifestyle.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Stress related illness are becoming increasingly popular. Causes and solutions v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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