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Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free children under 18, do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free children under 18, v. 1
It is needless to say that children's learning ability is of prime at developing stage. So experts have an opinion about learning an external language should be commenced at primary schools which probably enhances their skills in the long run than by doing it on a secondary level. So yes, it was weighed merits over the demerits, which will analyse here. Firstly primary institute is the base of any education system providing children to study with fundamental aspects of different subjects. Studying a foreign dialect in primary academy makes them well acquainted to the dialect eventually gaining them the ability to have a command on that particular subject than if started in the latter part of the school. Moreover students at that stage have fewer academic subjects and curriculums to follow, which gives extra room for learning a new dialect. To illustrate this, there are many schools in India who provide English study right from the primary section of the school which helps them to get used to the language easily despite with the fact that they are non- English speakers. On the other hand to induce a terminology in secondary institute also has certain benefits that it is dealt when students are bit mature and have improvise understanding towards the subject. But has constraints such as time limit and personal choice, which makes it perhaps difficult to develop a good expertise over the topic as they have loads of curriculum and major subjects to study. This often demonstrates lack of interest towards a task when opted in secondary institution. To sum up we have seen that learning a task at primary standard can enhance students' skills more meticulously, hence the merits outweighs its demerits.
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ability is of prime at developing stage.
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So
experts have an opinion about
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learning
an external language should
be commenced
at
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primary
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schools
which
probably
enhances their
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skills
in the long run than by doing it on a secondary level.
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yes, it
was weighed
merits over the demerits, which will
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Firstly
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primary
institute is the base of any education system providing children to study with fundamental aspects of
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different
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subjects
. Studying a foreign dialect in
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primary
academy
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makes
them well acquainted to the dialect
eventually
gaining them the ability to have a command on that particular
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subject
than if
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started
in the latter part of the
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school
.
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students at that stage have fewer academic
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subjects
and curriculums to follow, which gives extra room for
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learning
a new dialect. To illustrate this, there are
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many
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schools
in India who provide English study right from the
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primary
section of the
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school
which
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helps
them to
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to the language
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despite with the fact that they are non- English speakers.

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also
has certain benefits that it
is dealt
when students are
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bit
mature and have improvise understanding towards the
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subject
.
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But
has constraints such as time limit and personal choice, which
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makes
it perhaps difficult to develop a
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good
expertise over the topic as they have loads of curriculum and major
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subjects
to study. This
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often
demonstrates lack of interest towards a task when opted in secondary institution.

To sum up we have
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seen
that
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learning
a task at
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primary
standard can enhance students'
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skills
more
meticulously
,
hence
the merits outweighs its demerits.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free children under 18, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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