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Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. To what extent does price influence potential buyers? What other factors influence people to buy a product. v.2

Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. What other factors influence people to buy a product. v. 2
I disagreed with the statement above which people believe that the higher prices of the product will make them more willing to buy. The prices of the products are normally determined through its brand, processing fees, exporting fees or even promoting fees. It means that the costs for producing such products only required a small portion of its total prices. Hence, it means that a higher price does not mean to be higher quality of the product. In my points of view, I think that the price can influence potential buyers throughout its brand. People will tend to purchase the higher price of a product when they realized it is made or manufactured from a well-known brand. Additionally, people tend to know a famous brand more easily as compared to an unknown shop. It is because there are several branches of a brand in worldwide, which make people easy to access with. It is undeniable that the more well-known shops provide standard quality of the product. However, it does not guarantee that the cheaper products will always come with low quality. Besides, the other factors that influence people to buy the product is through marketing and promoting techniques. The higher exposure of the product throughout marketing techniques like advertisements, social media or ambassadors can increase the potential buyers to purchase with the product. It is because the marketing departments will do researches and surveys to know the current trend of the people’s needs. Consequently, people will like to try the new products when they are attracted by the advertisements or ambassadors. In short, people will be attracted to buy the product not only because of its higher prices. Some people are not able to afford with higher priced product, but more preferable to the normal or cheap products. The higher price of the product sometimes can be unnecessary for them. For them, a well-functioning product is relatively important than a well-known product.
I disagreed with the statement above which
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product
will
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make
them more willing to
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. The
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prices
of the
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products
are
normally
determined through its
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brand
, processing fees, exporting fees or even promoting fees. It means that the costs for producing such
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products
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only
required a
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small
portion of its total
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prices
.
Hence
, it means that a higher
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price
does not mean to be higher quality of the product.

In my points of view, I
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think
that the
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price
can influence potential buyers throughout its
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brand
.
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People
will tend to
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purchase
the higher
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price
of a
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product
when they realized it
is made
or manufactured from a well-known
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brand
.
Additionally
,
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people
tend to know a
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famous
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brand
more
easily
as compared to an unknown shop. It is
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because
there are several branches of a
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brand
in worldwide, which
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make
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people
easy to access with.

It is undeniable that the more well-known shops provide standard quality of the
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product
.
However
, it does not guarantee that the cheaper
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products
will always
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come
with low quality.

Besides
, the other factors that influence
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people
to
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buy
the
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product
is through marketing and promoting techniques. The higher exposure of the
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product
throughout marketing techniques like advertisements, social media or ambassadors can increase the potential buyers to
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purchase
with the
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product
. It is
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because
the marketing departments will do researches and surveys to know the
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current
trend of the
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people’s
needs.
Consequently
,
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people
will like to try the new
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products
when they
are attracted
by the advertisements or ambassadors.

In short,
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people
will
be attracted
to
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buy
the
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product
not
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only
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because
of its higher
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prices
.
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Some
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people
are not able to afford with higher priced
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product
,
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but
more preferable to the normal or
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cheap
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products
. The higher
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price
of the
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product
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sometimes
can be unnecessary for them. For them, a well-functioning
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product
is
relatively
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important
than a well-known
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product
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. What other factors influence people to buy a product. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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