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Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. To what extent does price influence potential buyers? What other factors influence people to buy a product? v.1

Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. What other factors influence people to buy a product? v. 1
Nowadays, we have countless manufacturers and numerous products to choose from. This creates hard competition between the companies. As a customer, there are several features we focus upon before choosing a product. Price is one of the main factors since often people assume that if the product is at a higher price, it either belongs to a well known brand or it is of good quality. Previously, we had very limited selections to choose from. However, because of globalization, we now have famous brands available everywhere. Examples include Nike, Puma and Addidas. People believe that branded products are of good quality and have a longer durability. Secondly, price comes in to the picture. It is true that if a product is priced high, the standard and the quality of raw materials used should be higher. Every customer seeks quality for the amount they spend. In addition, brands and price tags are used as ways to exhibit elements of social status. Some of the traditional brands spend huge amounts on advertisements, and in the modern world people are easily notified about advertisements in manifold ways such as newspapers, online, and via Television commercials. As a result, communities easily get attracted to the products and brands that are inviting them to spend money on their goods. Last but not the least, there are many celebrities who act as brand ambassadors for products, and convince their fans to use them. For instance, the famous singer and actress, Selena Gomez, has acted a brand ambassador for the Pantene shampoo which had actually tempted many of her fans to switch their shampoos to Pantene too. In summary, we live in a world where advertisements impact consumers. However, the impact is limited to some extent. In my opinion, consumers will analyse their needs before choosing a product.
Nowadays, we have countless manufacturers and numerous
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products
to choose from. This creates
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hard
competition between the
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companies
. As a customer, there are several features we focus upon
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before
choosing a
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product
.
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Price
is one of the main factors since
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often
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people
assume that if the
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product
is at a higher
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price
, it either belongs to a well known
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brand
or it is of
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good
quality.

Previously, we had
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very
limited selections to choose from.
However
,
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because
of globalization, we
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now
have
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famous
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brands
available everywhere. Examples include Nike, Puma and
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Addidas
.
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People
believe that branded
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products
are of
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good
quality and have a longer durability.

Secondly
,
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price
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comes
in to the picture. It is true that if a
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product
is priced
high, the standard and the quality of raw materials
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used
should be higher. Every customer seeks quality for the amount they spend.
In addition
,
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brands
and
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price
tags are
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used
as ways to exhibit elements of social status.

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Some of the
traditional
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brands
spend huge amounts on advertisements, and in the modern world
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people
are
easily
notified about advertisements in manifold ways such as newspapers, online, and via Television commercials.
As a result
, communities
easily
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get
attracted to the
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products
and
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brands
that are inviting them to spend money on their
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goods
. Last
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but
not the least, there are
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many
celebrities who act as
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brand
ambassadors for
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products
, and convince their fans to
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use
them.
For instance
, the
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famous
singer and actress, Selena Gomez, has acted a
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brand
ambassador for the
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Pantene
shampoo which had actually tempted
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many
of her fans to switch their shampoos to
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Pantene
too.

In summary, we
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live
in a world where advertisements impact consumers.
However
, the impact
is limited
to
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some
extent. In my opinion, consumers will
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analyse
their needs
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before
choosing a
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product
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. What other factors influence people to buy a product? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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