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Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? v.2

Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? v. 2
In my opinion, I think we are damaging the Earth by our activities. Earth from the beginning was a good place for living. Human just builds some tools and invents activities to live more convenient on the Earth. I think these are separate from each other completely. We are damaging the Earth by some activities like pumping a lot of water and oil, we are depleting some irresolvable energy from the Earth. Every day scientists are warning about this phenomenon. During years of using fuel and emit some smog and some greenhouse gases to the air, the Ozone layer has been destroyed. Ozone protect us from some of dangerous sun rays. If this crevice raise up, it will be a big threat for our health and life. By passing the time, the Earth has changed a lot. As long as we weren' t on the Earth until now, it undergoes some changes. At the beginning God changed it to be a place for us to live on it. Some changes like appearance of sea, mountains, volcanoes, beautiful prospects and many other things that were created in order to make it a place for living. So I think human activity has nothing to make it a better place to live. However we invent somethings to live better and in a more convenient way. Human activities are damaging the Earth because we are producing somethings that is not good for it. During the last decades population has grown a lot and they are using the energy as much as they can. Earth is the main source of most of the energies and each source one day would cease and finish. In agriculture we are cultivating too much even in places there isn' t water for irrigation. In that way farmers pump up water from the wells and after a while they will evacuate. Deserts are expanding and drought is becoming one of the significant problems for us. Still we are using oil as the first fuel for our machines, oil is one of the irresolvable source, if it finishes there is no way to reproduce it. Using the oil as fuel makes the air smoggy and it produces some gases that is very dangerous for us and for the Earth. Also in this case we are the one whom harming the Earth. Although scientists invent some ways to use less amount of fuel or water and they are trying to find alternatives for them. Solar systems and electronic machines are some of the example of their inventions. I think people will reach the point that they have to keep Earth healthy, and I see we are good on it. We should respect the Earth and try to preserve it. It is the place that let us live on it.
In my opinion, I
think
we are damaging the
Earth
by our
activities
.
Earth
from the beginning was a
good
place
for living. Human
just
builds
some
tools and invents
activities
to
live
more convenient on the
Earth
. I
think
these are separate from each other completely. We are damaging the
Earth
by
some
activities
like pumping
a lot of
water
and
oil
, we are depleting
some
irresolvable energy from the
Earth
. Every day scientists are warning about this phenomenon. During years of using
fuel
and emit
some
smog and
some
greenhouse gases to the air, the Ozone layer has been
destroyed
. Ozone protect us from
some
of
dangerous
sun rays. If this crevice raise up, it will be a
big
threat for our health and life.

By passing the time, the
Earth
has
changed
a lot. As long as we
weren&
#039; t on the
Earth
until
now
, it undergoes
some
changes
. At the beginning God
changed
it to be a
place
for us to
live
on it.
Some
changes
like appearance of sea, mountains, volcanoes,
beautiful
prospects and
many
other things that
were created
in order to
make
it a
place
for living.
So
I
think
human
activity
has nothing to
make
it a better
place
to
live
.
However
we invent somethings to
live
better and in a more convenient way.

Human
activities
are damaging the
Earth
because
we are producing somethings
that is
not
good
for it. During the last
decades
population has grown a
lot and
they are using the energy as much as they can.
Earth
is the main source of most of the energies and each source one day would cease and finish. In
agriculture we
are cultivating too much even in
places
there
isn&
#039; t
water
for irrigation. In that way farmers pump up
water
from the wells and after a while they will evacuate. Deserts are expanding and drought is becoming one of the significant problems for us.

Still
we are using
oil
as the
first
fuel
for our machines,
oil
is one of the irresolvable source, if it finishes there is no way to reproduce it. Using the
oil
as
fuel
makes
the air smoggy and it produces
some
gases
that is
very
dangerous
for us and for the
Earth
.
Also
in this case
we are the one whom harming the
Earth
. Although scientists invent
some
ways to
use
less amount of
fuel
or
water and
they are trying to find alternatives for them. Solar systems and electronic machines are
some of the
example of their inventions.

I
think
people
will reach the point that they
have to
keep
Earth
healthy, and I
see
we are
good
on it. We should respect the
Earth
and try to preserve it. It is the
place
that
let
us
live
on it.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
467 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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