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Question: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Question: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
The use of computers in our daily life is on a steep rise as it is an essential tool used both in our professional and personal life. Many believe that introduction to computers at a young age has a detrimental effect on children. While this holds true up to a certain extent when this affects their physical activity and face to face interaction with peers their own age. Personally, I believe that there should be a balance and constant supervision by parents. However, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages. Firstly, Computers are a huge source of information that will allow children to explore topics based on their interests and at their own pace. For example, Google, Wikipedia can provide any information within seconds. This ease of availability opens multiple options for children to explore and expand their interest. Computer based games are also known to improve dexterity in children, which is an added advantage. The downside of this ability to access information is their vulnerability to being exploited and bullied online. Children with their trusting nature tend to be easy targets for online predators and the possibility of being bullied is significantly higher due to anonymity internet provides. To neutralize this, periodic monitoring by parents is an absolute necessity. In conclusion, in life there is always a possibility of being exploited and bullied this can be avoided by taking a few simple precautions. The information and ability to access it regardless of age is an advantage that cannot be downplayed. Hence, a balance approach will help reduce risks.
The
use
of computers in our daily life is on a steep rise as it is an essential tool
used
both in our professional and personal life.
Many
believe that introduction to computers at a young age has a detrimental effect on
children
. While this holds true up to a certain extent when this affects their physical activity and face to face interaction with peers their
own
age.
Personally
, I believe that there should be a balance and constant supervision by parents.
However
, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages.

Firstly
, Computers are a huge source of
information
that will
allow
children
to explore topics based on their interests and at their
own
pace.
For example
, Google, Wikipedia can provide any
information
within seconds. This
ease
of availability opens multiple options for
children
to explore and expand their interest. Computer based games are
also
known to
improve
dexterity in
children
, which is an
added
advantage.

The downside of this ability to access
information
is their vulnerability to
being exploited
and bullied online.
Children
with their trusting nature tend to be easy targets for online predators and the possibility of
being bullied
is
significantly
higher due to anonymity internet provides. To neutralize this, periodic monitoring by parents is an absolute necessity.

In conclusion
, in life there is always a possibility of
being exploited
and bullied this can
be avoided
by taking a few simple precautions. The
information
and ability to access it regardless of age is an advantage that cannot
be downplayed
.
Hence
, a balance approach will
help
reduce
risks
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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