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Some people believe that telephone is the greatest invention of the last century. To what extent do you agree? v.2

Some people believe that telephone is the greatest invention of the last century. v. 2
Nowadays, its like people can't live without a telephone. Due to which it is consider that phone is the greatest invention of the last century. I agree with this statement. just becuase of this invention, the lives of people has become easier. Eventhough, it has given negative impact on the coming generation. Firstly, lets talk about the thing without which people can't live nowadays. A telephone provide alot of facilities. This invention help the long distance relation to excit. The splited families can keep contact with each others and do video calls. Moreover, it will make us remind about the important dates and things. The moblie can feed all our needed contacts and photos which are close to us. Although users don't need to remamber all the numbers and keep prints of the photos. For example, earlier we used to keep a dariy to note down the numbers of the relatives. Likewise our drawers will be filled with albums of pictures. Ather the electronic device have come in the hands of public they find free places in house. These are the basic things which the users enjoy. Inadditional, now the device provide a lot of facilities. There are many applications which would make publics life easier. The version of the phones are changing day by day. in the meanwhile, mankind doesn't need to go out for anything. Because the application in the cell phone would bring everything to the door steps. Individuals can transfer money to others, can order food, apply of exams, pay bills, do shopping sitting at home, etc. Such as, Google Pay, Uber Eats, Amazon, Flipkart, etc. There are furthermore use of the cell phone, it helps in finding the location. That means we will never get lost in the mid way. However, human beings are getting used to these faclities. Also individuals find problem without the device. To conclude, the moblie phones are usefull for mankinds and it make life better. With a divce human begin can servive like anything. This would give direction in an unknown place and even if there is no money the phone can do a lot for us.
Nowadays, its like
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people
can't
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live
without a telephone. Due to which it is
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consider
that
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phone
is the greatest invention of the last century. I
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agree
with this statement.
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just
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becuase
of this invention, the
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lives
of
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people
has become easier.
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Eventhough
, it has
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given
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negative
impact on the coming generation.

Firstly
,
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lets
talk about the thing without which
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people
can't
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live
nowadays. A telephone provide
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alot
of facilities. This invention
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help
the long distance relation to
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excit
. The
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splited
families can
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keep
contact with each
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others
and do video calls.
Moreover
, it will
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make
us remind about the
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important
dates and things. The
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moblie
can feed all our needed contacts and photos which are close to us. Although users don't need to
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remamber
all the numbers and
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keep
prints of the photos.
For example
, earlier we
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used
to
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keep
a
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dariy
to note down the numbers of the relatives.
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Likewise
our drawers will
be filled
with albums of pictures.
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Ather
the electronic device have
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come
in the hands of public they find free places in
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house
. These are the basic things which the users enjoy.

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Inadditional
,
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now
the device provide
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a lot of
facilities. There are
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many
applications which would
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make
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publics
life easier. The version of the
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phones
are changing day by day.
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in
the meanwhile, mankind doesn't need to go out for anything.
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Because
the application in the cell
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phone
would bring everything to the door steps. Individuals can transfer money to others, can order food, apply of exams, pay bills, do shopping sitting at home, etc. Such as, Google Pay, Uber Eats, Amazon, Flipkart, etc. There are
furthermore
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use
of the cell
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phone
, it
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helps
in finding the location. That means we will never
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get
lost in the mid way.
However
, human beings are getting
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used
to these
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faclities
.
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Also
individuals find problem without the device.

To conclude
, the
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moblie
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phones
are
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usefull
for
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mankinds
and it
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make
life better. With a
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divce
human
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begin
can
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servive
like anything. This would give direction in an unknown place and even if there is no money the
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phone
can do a lot for us.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that telephone is the greatest invention of the last century. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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