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More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
Majority of companies allow their employees to work from home instead of attending office regularly. Working remotely have both Pros and Cons, Pros include employee flexibility, lower stress for workers, Company can save its budget for travel and other expenses. On the other hand, there may not be direct interaction with employees leads to trust issues. In fact, the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages. The strengths of this policy include Flexibility, for instance, In the case of health issues or any activity which requires the employee's presence in the home can be achieved through Work from home. Travelling in traffic could affect an employee's mental strength and could lead to too much stress, however, working from home eliminates travelling in such traffic. Most of the employees face difficulties as they spend most of their time in office and cannot spend their time with family, moreover, working remotely could let an employee spend some time with family. In addition to employee benefits, Companies can also skip their budget which they spend on employee travel. In contrast, As the person is not physically present, we cannot assure that if the employee is working sincerely or not and that may affect business. Lacking direct interaction could give rise to trust issues. So, Working remotely is considerable until the work is efficient and there is no delay or errors in deliverables. To conclude, Allowing employees to work from home is a great idea until there is no issue in deliverables. The strengths of work from home dominates weakness of the same.
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have both Pros and Cons, Pros include
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flexibility, lower
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stress
for workers,
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can save its budget for travel and other expenses.
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employees
leads to trust
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issues
. In fact, the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages.

The strengths of this policy include Flexibility,
for instance
, In the case of health
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issues
or any activity which requires the employee's presence in the home can
be achieved
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Work
from home. Travelling in traffic could affect an employee's mental strength and could lead to too much
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stress
,
however
,
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working
from home eliminates travelling in such traffic. Most of the
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employees
face difficulties as they
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spend
most of their time in office and cannot
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their time with family,
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working
remotely
could
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benefits,
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travel.

In contrast
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physically
present, we cannot assure that if the
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employee
is
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working
sincerely
or not and that may affect business. Lacking direct interaction could give rise to trust
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issues
.
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,
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remotely
is considerable until the
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work
is efficient and there is no delay or errors in deliverables.

To conclude
, Allowing
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employees
to
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work
from home is a great
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idea
until there is no
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issue
in deliverables. The strengths of
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work
from home dominates weakness of the same.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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