Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.6

Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. v. 6
While Focusing on all courses for a teenager at an education institution is undoubtedly good, However there are definitely some advantages to selecting only the subject of interest or choosing the courses where someone is good at, this essay will discuss both the views. As teenagers the very next big decision that awaits in life is choosing the right career which fits one’s interests and which is in perfect alignment with goals of life, having taken all the courses at school will definitely open gates to several career choices, like for example a student who studies all subjects which includes math’s and science can definitely opt to become a computer programmer, doctor, civil engineer options are many versus a student who picks only selective courses such as philosophy, English, literature would only be limited to career choices such as journalist, news reader and anchor. Also having basic skills of math’s will help to understand numbers better in life, whether it is calculating the percentage while buying something on discount, calculating interest rate on a mortgage or understanding the numbers while investing in a stock market. On the other hand, choosing the subjects of interest will keep the teenage students motivated to the study that is more focused, and is particularly if they already have a career choice in the mind, then it makes much sense to choose only those subjects which match with their life goals, like for instance, "if someone decides to be a chemist" he doesn’t have to take the course of biology, this ensures that his mental energy or resources are invested in the right direction. To Conclude, it is certain that selecting the subjects of interest is beneficial to the teenagers having a career path or a career goal in mind, but still subject like math’s should be studied as this is applied in every part of life where numbers are involved, Personally in my opinion, I feel it is better to enrol in all subjects as this opens up door to several other career options and plays a vital role in building a good critical and analytical skill set of a student.
While Focusing on all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenager
at an education institution is
undoubtedly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
,
However
there are definitely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advantages to selecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
or choosing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
where someone is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at, this essay will discuss both the views.

As
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
next
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
decision that awaits in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
is choosing the right
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
which fits one’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interests
and which is in perfect alignment with goals of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
, having taken all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
at school will definitely open gates to several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
choices, like
for example
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
who studies all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
which includes math’s and science can definitely opt to become a computer programmer, doctor, civil engineer options are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
versus a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
who picks
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
selective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
such as philosophy, English, literature would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
be limited
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
choices such as journalist, news reader and anchor.
Also
having basic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
of math’s will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to understand numbers better in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
, whether it is calculating the percentage while buying something on discount, calculating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
rate on a mortgage or understanding the numbers while investing in a stock market.

On the other hand
, choosing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the teenage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
motivated to the study
that is
more focused, and is
particularly
if they already have a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
choice in the mind, then it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
much sense to choose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
which match with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
goals, like
for instance
,
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
if someone decides to be a chemist
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
he doesn’t
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
of biology, this ensures that his mental energy or resources
are invested
in the right direction.

To Conclude
, it is certain that selecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
is beneficial to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
having a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
path or a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
goal in mind,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
like math’s should
be studied
as this
is applied
in every part of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
where numbers
are involved
,
Personally
in my opinion, I feel it is better to enrol in all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
as this opens up door to several other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
options and plays a vital role in building a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
critical and analytical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
set of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts