Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or they find most interest. To what extend do you agree or disagree. v.2
Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or they find most interest. v. 2
Nowadays there are myriad kinds of subjects that teenagers can learn it in school. In addition, it is well known that teenagers must give their best to all school subjects. In contrast, teenagers should focus on the subject that they like it. I strongly believe that I have different views regarding the statement that say teenagers need to emphasize on all school subjects.
To begin with, if children are learning all school subjects I believe they can make their brain exhausted. Moreover, not merely their brain that will suffer, but also their body too. There was a survey conducted by an array of sociology students from the Monash University in 2012. From the survey they found out that majority of teenagers in Melbourne feel frustrated, and also majority of them are suffering mental anxiety because of learning subjects that they do not like.
The next, learning all of school subjects are not beneficial enough and we will not utilize all of them. For example; currently I merely focus on chemistry, mathematics, and English because I want to take pharmacology science as my major in the university. I will not say that other subjects are not vital enough, but instead learning minor subjects such as; history, civics, and others, we can emphasize our focus more wider on our major subjects that we will take it as our guidance in the future.
All in all, as a parents we must let our children choose their own subjects. Therefore, they can sharpen their skills more often, consequently, they can be what they wanted to be
Nowadays there are myriad kinds of
subjects
that
teenagers
can learn it in
school
.
In addition
, it is well known that
teenagers
must
give their best to all
school
subjects
.
In contrast
,
teenagers
should focus on the
subject
that they like it. I
strongly
believe that I have
different
views regarding the statement that say
teenagers
need to emphasize on all
school
subjects.
To
begin
with, if children are
learning
all
school
subjects
I believe they can
make
their brain exhausted.
Moreover
, not
merely
their brain that will suffer,
but
also
their body too. There was a survey conducted by an array of sociology students from the Monash University in 2012. From the survey they found out that majority of
teenagers
in Melbourne feel frustrated, and
also
majority of
them are suffering mental anxiety
because
of
learning
subjects
that they do not like.
The
next
,
learning
all of
school
subjects
are not beneficial
enough and
we will not utilize all of them.
For example
;
currently
I
merely
focus on chemistry, mathematics, and English
because
I want to take pharmacology science as my major in the university. I will not say that other
subjects
are not vital
enough
,
but
instead
learning
minor
subjects
such as; history, civics,
and others
, we can emphasize our focus
more wider
on our major
subjects
that we will take it as our guidance in the future.
All in all, as
a parents
we
must
let
our children choose their
own
subjects
.
Therefore
, they can sharpen their
skills
more
often
,
consequently
, they can be what they wanted to be
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