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Environmental problems cannot be solved by one or a few countries. Instead, they should be solved with international effort. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Environmental problems cannot be solved by one or a few countries. Instead, they should be solved with international effort. v. 1
It is increasingly clear that humans have strained and damaged the natural environment. Although individual countries can contribute to environmental protection, I believe that the superior approach is to protect the environment at an international level. National governments and large institutions make a difference in improvements of the natural environment to some extent. This is because there are different causes of environmental problems in different countries due to geographical location. For example, some inner lands in China and other continents close to the equator are more likely to suffer from desertification, while flooding caused by climate change occurs more frequent in coastal areas. Therefore, it is incredibly complicated to create policies tailoring the needs of countries. However, environmental destruction is not the only severe problems faced by the modern world, so some governments may ignore the importance of protecting the environment and prioritize other issues. On the one hand, if they are supervised and restricted by the international policy, they might, for instance, introduce laws to limit the emission of greenhouse gas from factories to maintain their global status and influence. On the other hand, addressing environmental issues at the international level can benefit some developing countries. The lack of financial assistance may hinder them from progressing, so with the aid of developed countries, they can mitigate the effect of climate change. For example, China sent experts and poured millions of money into some African countries in order to reduce their reliance on fossil fuels by developing environmentally-friendly and renewable energy sources, such as solar and hydro power. In conclusion, we can achieve more by tackling environmental troubles with international effort, despite that measures introduced by governments are effective in some fields.
It is
increasingly
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clear
that humans have strained and damaged the natural
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environment
. Although individual
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countries
can contribute to
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environmental
protection, I believe that the superior approach is to protect the
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environment
at an
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international
level.

National
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governments
and large institutions
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make
a difference in improvements of the natural
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environment
to
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some
extent. This is
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because
there are
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different
causes of
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environmental
problems in
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different
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countries
due to geographical location.
For example
,
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some
inner lands in China and other continents close to the equator are more likely to suffer from desertification, while flooding caused by climate
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change
occurs more frequent in coastal areas.
Therefore
, it is
incredibly
complicated to create policies tailoring the needs of countries.

However
,
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environmental
destruction is not the
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only
severe problems faced by the modern world,
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so
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some
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governments
may
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ignore
the importance of protecting the
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environment
and prioritize other issues. On the one hand, if they
are supervised
and restricted by the
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international
policy, they might,
for instance
, introduce laws to limit the emission of greenhouse gas from factories to maintain their global status and influence.

On the other hand
, addressing
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environmental
issues at the
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international
level can benefit
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some
developing
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countries
. The lack of financial assistance may hinder them from progressing,
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so
with the aid of developed
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countries
, they can mitigate the effect of climate
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change
.
For example
, China
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sent
experts and poured millions of money into
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some
African
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countries
in order to
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reduce
their reliance on fossil fuels by developing
environmentally
-friendly and renewable energy sources, such as solar and
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hydro power
.

In conclusion
, we can achieve more by tackling
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environmental
troubles with
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international
effort, despite that measures introduced by
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governments
are effective in
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some
fields.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Environmental problems cannot be solved by one or a few countries. Instead, they should be solved with international effort. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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