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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.6

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. v. 6
These days, the juvenile is requiring social services at their leisure time. What is the most effective method for dealing with community work for free cost? Some people think that the merits of teenagers and society as well. In this essay, I agree to support my opinion with examples. First of all, the youths are very pivotal to services in the communities itself. Presently, most of the members are doing charity and donations for unpaid. There are thinking positively like mother homes in India. For instance, Mother Teresa's trust is going in India that helps for people to give money. Moreover, changing in the world slowly that persons are taking responsibility. At school age, juvenile need to encourage to build some skills that guarantee of fifty years. Secondly, adolescents are not joining any works because of age problems. Do not motivate any parents to kind activities in life? Furthermore, teenagers will not be given one rupee any trust that is a real problem that occurs. Everyone doing their own also difficult these days. For example, the ashram is keeping the parents, but the waste of money that youth are moving bad behaviour a manner. In conclusion. It is a common belief that youngsters should be respective to do free cost society services that are the benefit and community. I believe that donate and the charity has developed throughout the country to the community. I think that a certain time for getting problems, then it depends on the ages of the adolescent.
These days, the juvenile is requiring social services at their leisure time. What is the most effective method for dealing with
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community
work for free cost?
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Some
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people
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think
that the merits of
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teenagers
and society
as well
. In this essay, I
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agree
to support my opinion with examples.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the youths are
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very
pivotal to services in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
communities
itself.
Presently
, most of the members are doing charity and donations for unpaid. There are thinking
positively
like mother homes in India.
For instance
, Mother Teresa's trust is going in India that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to give money.
Moreover
, changing in the world
slowly
that persons are taking responsibility. At school age, juvenile need to encourage to build
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that guarantee of fifty years.

Secondly
, adolescents are not joining any works
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of age problems. Do not motivate any parents to kind activities in life?
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
will not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
one rupee any trust
that is
a real problem that occurs. Everyone
The pronoun 'Everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "does", "did".
doing
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
also
difficult these days.
For example
, the ashram is keeping the parents,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the waste of money that youth are moving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
a manner.

In conclusion
. It is a common belief that youngsters should be respective to do free cost society services that are the benefit and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
. I believe that donate and the charity has developed throughout the country to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that a certain time for getting problems, then it depends on the ages of the adolescent.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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