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Some people believe that taxing companies, which cause it, is the best way to reduce industrial pollution while some suggest that there are several other ways to solve this trouble. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people believe that taxing companies, which cause it, is the best way to reduce industrial pollution while some suggest that there are several other ways to solve this trouble. v. 2
One of the situation of healthcare is that humans are living longer and expectations are enhancing. On this development adverse effects are taking place over the benefits too, however advantages always overweights them. By the discovery in science, health protection sector is growing more and more benefits. Advanced treatments are developed for chronic disease which save the life of most of the patients. There are many life saviours examples in medical fields such as heart transplants, which is helpful for heart patients, liver implants, surgeries so on. Medical responsibility has gotten so much advancement by which can regrow the whole organs and can give the new life who is going to die. To get benefit of medical treatments, the government is giving various welfare to poor people so that their disease can be treated. Furthermore, due to environmental problems, many diseases are developing which is served by advanced methods. In a recent case, one of a respiratory disease is spreading in all over the world, however scientist will find cure for sure. Advancement has enhanced in that way which leads to the major problem of populations from all over the world. Due to advanced health responsibility side effects are taking place in the body, such as chemotherapy in cancer treatment which is very hard to tolerate. In conclusion, I would say, one coin has both sides, a good and second one is bad. So health care is advantageous and disadvantageous too. However benefits bit the disadvantages, which is a positive point about the medical field.
One of the situation of healthcare is that humans are living longer and expectations are enhancing. On this development adverse effects are taking place over the
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benefits
too,
however
advantages always
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overweights
them.

By the discovery in science, health protection sector is growing more and more
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benefits
. Advanced treatments
are developed
for chronic
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disease
which save the life of most of the patients. There are
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many
life
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saviours
examples in
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medical
fields such as heart transplants, which is helpful for heart patients, liver implants, surgeries
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so
on.
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Medical
responsibility has gotten
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so
much advancement by which can regrow the whole organs and can give the new life who is going to
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die
. To
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get
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benefit
of
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medical
treatments, the
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government
is giving various welfare to poor
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people
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so
that their
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disease
can
be treated
.
Furthermore
, due to environmental problems,
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many
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diseases
are developing which
is served
by advanced methods. In a recent case, one of a respiratory
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disease
is spreading in all over the world,
however
scientist will find cure for sure.

Advancement has enhanced in that way which leads to the major problem of populations from all over the world. Due to advanced health responsibility side effects are taking place in the body, such as chemotherapy in cancer treatment which is
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very
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hard
to tolerate.

In conclusion
, I would say, one coin has both sides, a
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good
and second one is
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bad
.
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So
health care is advantageous and disadvantageous too.
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However
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benefits
bit the disadvantages, which is a
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positive
point about the
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medical
field.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that taxing companies, which cause it, is the best way to reduce industrial pollution while some suggest that there are several other ways to solve this trouble. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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