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Some parents think that children should not read books for entertainment. They should read only serious educational books. Give your opinion. v.1

Some parents think that children should not read books for entertainment. They should read only serious educational books. Give your opinion. v. 1
These days, a growing number of young parents determine to give birth later in life. This can be attributed to some reasons and some effects either positive or negative can be considered There are several reasons why a number of people want to have children later in life. First, since many young people are willing to pursue careers, delaying parenthood helps them have much more time to get more done, leading to greater success. Second, many young individuals understand the magnitude of children rearing responsibility, they in turn give birth later in life. In fact, taking care of children, either feeding or soothing babies are considered as a full-time job, which discourages many would-be parents. In addition, this choice allows them to have more time to spend on personal hobbies. For instance, it is easier for a young couple to travel when they do not have a baby to nurture Nevertheless, this tendency might bring about some negative effects on both family life and society. Fist, having children later will cause a significant age gap between two generations. In fact, it is harder for parents to understand and communicate with their offering. Second, by giving birth when they are too old, the babies being might be less physically healthy. This means that the future workforce might be affected if too many people decide to follow this trend. In conclusion, there are some reasons why many people prefer to have children later in life, and this tendency can result in some negative impacts on both family life and society
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parents determine to give birth
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. This can
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reasons and
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can be
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considered


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people
want to have
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children
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later
in
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life
.
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, since
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young
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people
are willing to pursue careers, delaying parenthood
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helps
them have much more time to
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get
more done, leading to greater success. Second,
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many
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young
individuals understand the magnitude of
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children
rearing responsibility, they in turn give birth
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later
in
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life
. In fact, taking care of
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children
, either feeding or soothing babies
are considered
as a full-time job, which discourages
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many
would-be parents.
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allows
them to have more time to spend on personal hobbies.
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couple to travel when they do not have a baby to
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nurture


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effects on both family
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life
and society. Fist, having
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children
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later
will cause a significant age gap between two generations. In fact, it is harder for parents to understand and communicate with their offering. Second, by giving birth when they are too
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old
, the babies being might be less
physically
healthy. This means that the future workforce might be
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affected
if too
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many
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people
decide to follow this trend.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
reasons why
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many
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people
prefer to have
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children
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later
in
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life
, and this tendency can result in
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some
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negative
impacts on both family
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life
and society
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some parents think that children should not read books for entertainment. They should read only serious educational books. Give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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