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Some people believe that taxing companies, which cause it, is the best way to reduce industrial pollution while some suggest that there are several other ways to solve this trouble. Discuss both the views and give your opinion v.1

Some people believe that taxing companies, which cause it, is the best way to reduce industrial pollution while some suggest that there are several other ways to solve this trouble. 1
Some individuals are of the opinion that industries which cause pollution should be taxed heavily so as to reduce pollution, whereas others opine that pollution should be controlled by other means. This essay intends to discuss both perspectives. I, however, side with the latter view Those who are in favour of taxing companies say so because it is these companies which cause pollution and they should pay for cleaning it up. The ordinary people should not have to pay for it through taxes. Obviously, if government pays for it, it would be through the common man's pocket. On the other hand, other methods to deal with the situation would be better. This is because it would be very difficult to judge which industries are causing how much pollution. They would all shrug off their shoulders and that would make matter worse. Secondly, these companies would claim that they are already paying a lot of taxes and so it becomes the government's responsibility. Other methods should be used to tackle this problem. To begin with, the government can make it mandatory for these industries to set up effluent-treatement plants. Government can also give them subsidies for such projects. This would ensure that these effluents don't contaminate the underground water. These industries should also be encouraged to plant trees. They should have a green belt all around them so that the trees absorb all carbon dioxide liberated To conclude, taxing the industries would not work as a good solution for reducing pollution and other methods should be looked into.
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Some
individuals are of the opinion that
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industries
which cause
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pollution
should
be taxed
heavily
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so as to
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reduce
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pollution
, whereas others opine that
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pollution
should
be controlled
by
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other
means. This essay intends to discuss both perspectives. I,
however
, side with the latter view

Those who are in
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favour
of taxing
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companies
say
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so
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because
it is these
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companies
which cause
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pollution and
they should pay for cleaning it up. The ordinary
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people
should not
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have to
pay for it through taxes.
Obviously
, if
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government
pays for it, it would be through the common
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man
's pocket.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
methods to deal with the situation would be better. This is
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because
it would be
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very
difficult to judge which
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industries
are causing how much
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pollution
. They would all shrug off their shoulders and that would
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make
matter worse.
Secondly
, these
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companies
would claim that they are already paying
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a lot of
taxes and
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so
it becomes the
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government
's responsibility.

Other methods should be
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used
to tackle this problem. To
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begin
with, the
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government
can
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make
it mandatory for these
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industries
to set up
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effluent-treatement
plants.
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Government
can
also
give them subsidies for such projects. This would ensure that these effluents don't contaminate the underground water. These
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industries
should
also
be encouraged
to plant trees. They should have a green belt all around them
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so
that the trees absorb all carbon dioxide
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liberated


To conclude
, taxing the
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industries
would not work as a
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good
solution for reducing
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pollution
and
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other
methods should
be looked
into.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that taxing companies, which cause it, is the best way to reduce industrial pollution while some suggest that there are several other ways to solve this trouble. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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