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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. v.16

Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 16
Certain societies believe that adolescents do not have to provide their tasks, which they do at home to their teachers, while others say that practice is important in raising a child. From my point of view, I think that taking, practice for teachers helps in raising children and in their progress more than not giving it up, considering that it is not necessary to do it for developers. On the one hand, many think it is easier for most people do not send children exercise to their teachers, as they believe that this does not play a major role in the education of children. In other words, it can affect the morale of students, and homework is not of much use, because most children around the world write about each other's Internet, and therefore they will get used to everything ready from an early age. Despite this, according to most parents in the 21st century, they study too much and there is no free time to relax. On the other hand, exercise is very important in the development and upbringing of a child from school years. For example, to fully master the topic of the lesson and fix all incomprehensible points, as well as the training load, a guarantee that the child will not be sitting on the gadgets all the time. And thanks to different home tasks, you can develop other skills, character traits, like responsibility and punctuality. Finally, in my point of view, considering both versions of this discussion, the task should be given, but not so much as there are other lessons, because each student and each teacher have important lessons. Moreover I think that it is necessary to narrow the circle of more important lessons that will clearly help students in their future. In conclusion, it is up to the ministry to decide whether to give homework to students or not to give information, but they must take into account the opinions of parents, students and teachers so as not to hurt their development in education.
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provide their tasks, which they do at home to their
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teachers
, while others say that practice is
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important
in raising a child. From my point of view, I
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think
that taking, practice for
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teachers
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helps
in raising
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children
and in their progress more than not giving it up, considering that it is not necessary to do it for developers.

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it is easier for most
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people
do not
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send
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children
exercise to their
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teachers
, as they believe that this does not play a major role in the education of
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children
. In
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other
words, it can affect the morale of
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students
, and homework is not of much
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,
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most
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children
around the world write about each other's Internet, and
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they will
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get
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to everything ready from an early age. Despite this, according to most parents in the 21st century, they study too much and there is no free time to relax.

On the
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hand, exercise is
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important
in the development and upbringing of a child from school years.
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fully
master the topic of the
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lesson
and
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fix
all incomprehensible points,
as well
as the training load, a guarantee that the child will not be sitting on the gadgets all the time. And thanks to
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different
home tasks, you can develop
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other
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skills
, character traits, like responsibility and punctuality.

Finally
, in my point of view, considering both versions of this discussion, the task should be
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,
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each
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.
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that it is necessary to narrow the circle of more
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that will
clearly
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help
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students
in their future.

In conclusion
, it is up to the ministry to decide whether to give homework to
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students
or not to give information,
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but
they
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must
take into account the opinions of parents,
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students
and
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teachers
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so
as not to hurt their development in education.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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