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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.12

Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 12
Some argue that school teachers should not assign any homework to their students, while there are others who believe that it is important for a child’s education. Although homework plays a very beneficial role in improving children academically, it does not give them enough time to pursue extra-curricular activities for self-development. On the one hand, people believe that homework improves academic results of students. If a student continuously practices the content taught to him in school, he will be able to memorize and use it easily. For example, according to a survey conducted by the Indian Education Council, 60% of students who topped their class attributed their success to completing homework assigned to them by their teachers. However, I do not agree with this view because it is important for children not to be involved in school work all the time and do other extra-curricular activities, which helps further develop their overall personality. On the other hand, many believe that assigning homework after school is detrimental for a child’s development. A student spends a substantial amount of time at school during the day, and If he is forced to do additional assignments at home, he will not have time to pursue other interests, such as sports and hobbies, which are equally important for a child’s overall growth. To illustrate, when a child plays sports with his friends, he learns the art of team work and mutual respect, which is impossible to acquire simply by reading books. I believe that this view is valid because students can learn a lot of “life-lessons” from these interests, and in the long run, have a positive effect on their lives. In conclusion, although homework helps in improving a child’s academic result, there are other aspects of development which are equally important, and children need to be given free time to pursue them.
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teachers should not assign any
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students
, while there are others who
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believe
that it is
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important
for a
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child’s
education. Although
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plays a
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very
beneficial role in improving children
academically
, it does not give them
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enough
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time
to pursue extra-curricular activities for self-development.

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people
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believe
that
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homework
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improves
academic results of
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students
. If a
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student
continuously
practices the content taught to him in
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school
, he will be able to memorize and
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use
it
easily
.
For example
, according to a survey conducted by the Indian Education Council, 60% of
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students
who topped their
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class
attributed their success to completing
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homework
assigned to them by their teachers.
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, I do not
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agree
with this view
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it is
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important
for children not to
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work all the
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time
and do
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other
extra-curricular activities, which
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helps
further
develop their
overall
personality.

On the
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other
hand,
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many
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believe
that assigning
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homework
after
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school
is detrimental for a
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child’s
development. A
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student
spends a substantial amount of
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time
at
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school
during the day, and If he
is forced
to do additional assignments at home, he will not have
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time
to pursue
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other
interests, such as sports and hobbies, which are
equally
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important
for a
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child’s
overall
growth. To illustrate, when a
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child
plays sports with his friends, he learns the art of team work and mutual respect, which is impossible to acquire
simply
by reading books. I
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believe
that this view is valid
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because
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students
can learn
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a lot of
“life-lessons” from these interests, and in the long run, have a
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positive
effect on their
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lives
.

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, although
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homework
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helps
in improving a
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child’s
academic result, there are
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other
aspects of development which are
equally
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important
, and children need to be
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given
free
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time
to pursue them.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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