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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ’ v.2

Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. ’ v. 2
Recent research on the significance of homework in the overall development of the scholastic performance of school going children has sparked a massive debate on its necessity with people arguing if homeworks are important. Here in this essay, let's take a glimpse at both the ends of the spectrum. Homework facilitates self assessment and helps the learners identify the problem areas, by themselves. Children are taught to deal with responsibility from a younger age, which becomes a valuable attribute when they join the work force. Repeatedly working on similar concepts by means of homework assignments, leads to better comprehension of the ideas and improves critical thinking. It is believed by some people that school going children should limit their academic activities to school so that they could spend the time at home, playing a sport or learning a new hobby. Family bonding time is getting affected due to the need for children to do a great deal of their academic work, at home. Due to the excessive amount of studying, most children go on to despise education and the percentage of school dropouts in the Western world is alarmingly high. Moreover, since the maximum amount of hours of a child's life is spent in an educational institute, so the remaining amount should be dedicated to activities other than that. In conclusion, I believe that homework aids the students in keeping track of the lessons taught at school, so they are a prerequisite for a proper education; however, there shouldn't be a lot of pressure on the young minds and they should be offered the liberty of a regular childhood.
Recent research on the significance of
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in the
overall
development of the scholastic performance of
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school
going
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children
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homeworks
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. Here in this essay,
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's take a glimpse at both the ends of the spectrum.

Homework facilitates self assessment and
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helps
the learners identify the problem areas, by themselves.
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Children
are taught
to deal with responsibility from a younger age, which becomes a valuable attribute when they
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join
the work force.
Repeatedly
working on similar concepts by means of
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homework
assignments, leads to better comprehension of the
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ideas
and
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improves
critical thinking.

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is believed
by
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some
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people
that
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school
going
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children
should limit their academic activities to
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school
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so
that they could spend the time at home, playing a sport or learning a new hobby. Family bonding time is getting
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affected
due to the need for
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children
to do a great deal of their academic work, at home. Due to the excessive amount of studying, most
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children
go on to despise education and the percentage of
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school
dropouts in the Western world is
alarmingly
high.
Moreover
, since the maximum amount of hours of a child's life
is spent
in an educational institute,
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so
the remaining amount should
be dedicated
to activities other than that.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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homework
aids the students in keeping
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track
of the lessons taught at
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school
,
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so
they are a prerequisite for a proper education;
however
, there shouldn't be
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a lot of
pressure on the young
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minds and
they should
be offered
the liberty of a regular childhood.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. ’ v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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