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Some People believe that Robots play an important role in future societies While other argue that robots might have negative effects on societies give often v.2

Some People believe that Robots play an important role in future societies While other argue that robots might have negative effects on societies give often v. 2
Currently, use of the technology is increasing in every field. It is common in every field. Human uses it day-to-day life. Technology reduces men’s effort and it saves time that is very helpful for any human. Nowadays, robots are used in industries, residential area, transportation etc. Robots impact on society might be good or bad. Every technology have its pros and cons. According to me, robots are very helpful for people. Firstly, robots can work more precisely than human. Furthermore, robots saves time and increase safety. For example, to clean the house or office, after configure robot it work automatically and clean the house. Hence, it saves time and convenient for human. Moreover, in huge industries, artificial intelligent robot are used. They can think like human. To illustrate, artificial intelligent robot generate output as input received that means, if that robot get some unwanted task and do not aware of how to complete this task, therefore, it think and give appropriate output. This evolution will change human life. Although, this robots have negative impact like it take human jobs. Therefore, unemployment rate will increase. Furthermore, people rely more and more on robots so, it will indirectly effect on human health. In addition, robot maintenance is very huge. Hence, it also affects financially to people. In conclusion, for industrial purpose, robots are very helpful and effectiveness. In addition, it also use in home. Nevertheless, every coin has two side, in this case, robots takes job of human and it indirectly affect financial and human health.
Currently
,
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use
of the technology is increasing in every field. It is common in every field.
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Human
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uses
it day-to-day life. Technology
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reduces
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men
’s effort and it saves time
that is
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very
helpful for any
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human
. Nowadays, robots are
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used
in industries, residential area, transportation etc. Robots impact on society might be
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good
or
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bad
. Every technology have its pros and cons.
This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
, robots are
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very
helpful for
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people
.

Firstly
, robots can work more
precisely
than
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human
.
Furthermore
, robots saves time and increase safety.
For example
, to clean the
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house
or office, after configure robot it
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work
automatically
and clean the
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house
.
Hence
, it saves time and convenient for human.

Moreover
, in huge industries, artificial intelligent robot are
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used
. They can
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think
like
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human
. To illustrate, artificial intelligent robot generate output as input received that means, if that robot
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get
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some
unwanted task and do not aware of how to complete this task,
therefore
, it
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think
and give appropriate output. This evolution will
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change
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human
life.

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Although
,
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this
robots have
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negative
impact like it take
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human
jobs.
Therefore
, unemployment rate will increase.
Furthermore
,
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people
rely more and more on robots
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so
, it will
indirectly
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effect
on
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human
health.
In addition
, robot maintenance is
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very
huge.
Hence
, it
also
affects
financially
to
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people
.

In conclusion
, for industrial purpose, robots are
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very
helpful and effectiveness.
In addition
, it
also
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use
in home.
Nevertheless
, every coin has two side,
in this case
, robots takes job of
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human
and it
indirectly
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affect
financial and
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human
health.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Some People believe that Robots play an important role in future societies While other argue that robots might have negative effects on societies give often v. 2

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  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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