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Some people believe that reading stories from e book better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people believe that reading stories from e book better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. v. 1
Nowadays, children habituated to use technology and even spending most of their time in watching TV or involving themselves on computer games. Parents should take the responsibility of their children to motivate them on reading stories from e book. This essay will describe the importance as well as the benefits of reading e books. To begin with, Children are the future generation of our nation should bring up in an effective manner. Apart from their education system they ought to develop their skills through reading stories online. Reading is important not only improving their vocabulary skills, but also memory power. Due to the increase of technology and laptops, there are more resources available in the online market to utilize effectively apart from playing computer games and watching TV. Eventually, Machine accessible games not only diminishes the eye sight, but also it spoils both physical and mental health. Ebooks complements children with different languages to learn. The learning of multiple language helps in enhancing their communicating skill and to be confident while travelling around the world. Language is the most common problem people are facing when the transition occur. Ebooks will enhance language skills and demolish the fear to communicate publicly at an earlier stage. Of their life. Many ebooks, websites like many books, bookshops are providing ample of valuable story books to read and study. Sometimes we could not find the greatest and famous author's story books in the offline market, but it can be available over the internet. Instead of wasting money to buy a book, pupil can download all the material at free of cost that retain transportation cost and saves time too.
Nowadays,
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children
habituated to
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use
technology and even spending most of their time in watching TV or involving themselves on computer games. Parents should take the responsibility of their
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children
to motivate them on reading
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stories
from e
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book
. This essay will
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describe
the importance
as well
as the benefits of reading
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e books
.

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begin
with,
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Children
are the future generation of our nation should bring up
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in an effective manner
. Apart from their education system they ought to develop their
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skills
through reading
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stories
online.

Reading is
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important
not
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only
improving their vocabulary
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skills
,
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but
also
memory power.

Due to the increase of technology and laptops, there are more resources available in the online market to utilize
effectively
apart from playing computer games and watching TV.
Eventually
, Machine accessible games not
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only
diminishes the
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eye sight
,
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but
also
it spoils both physical and mental health.
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Ebooks complements
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children
with
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different
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languages
to learn. The learning of multiple
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language
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helps
in enhancing their communicating
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skill
and to be confident while travelling around the world.
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Language
is the most common problem
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people
are facing when the transition
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occur
.
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Ebooks
will enhance
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language
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skills
and demolish the fear to communicate
publicly
at an earlier stage.

Of their life.

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Many
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ebooks
, websites like
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many
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books
, bookshops are providing ample of valuable
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story
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books
to read and study.
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Sometimes
we could not find the greatest and
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famous
author's
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story
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books
in the offline market,
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but
it can be available over the internet.

Instead
of wasting money to
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buy
a
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book
, pupil can download all the material at free of cost that retain transportation cost and saves time too.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that reading stories from e book better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
275 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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