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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. v. 2
In the contemporary society, children have numerous ways to gain information and entertain such as books, tv or computer games. There is a school of thought that for children, it is better to read stories from books rather than watching tv or playing computer games. In my opinion, I totally agree with this view. For a variety of reasons, children will greatly benefit from reading books. Firstly, it helps improve children’s imagination. By this I mean that when we read a book, we can create characters, contexts or actions in our mind within words in books that authors use to describe. This exercise stimulates many functions of the brain the most. In addition, reading not only helps develop creativity but also enhance verbal abilities. This is because there are a wide range of complicated and useful vocabulary and sentences in books which children can memorize to enrich their speech. apart from the practical reasons expressed above, I believe that reading books also helps people discover their own unique version. A reason for this is that people have different ways to judge and interpret the issue due to their angle of view. For example, one person may find the jungle to be peaceful, while another may feel that there are many wild beasts. As a result, reading books give children an opportunity to have independent thoughts and grow up to become their sole and irreplaceable version. In conclusion, I firmly believe that reading stories from books give children more benefits than watching tv and playing games. In the future, it would be a way to evaluate the academic level of people.
In the contemporary society,
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children
have numerous ways to gain information and entertain such as
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books
,
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tv
or computer games. There is a school of
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thought
that for
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children
, it is better to read stories from
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books
rather
than watching
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tv
or playing computer games. In my opinion, I
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agree
with this view.

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children
will
greatly
benefit from
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reading
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books
.
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, it
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helps
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improve
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children’s
imagination. By this I mean that when we read a
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book
, we can create characters, contexts or actions in our mind within words in
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books
that authors
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use
to
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describe
. This exercise stimulates
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many
functions of the brain the most.
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,
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reading
not
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only
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helps
develop creativity
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but
also
enhance verbal abilities. This is
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because
there are a wide range of complicated and useful vocabulary and sentences in
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books
which
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children
can memorize to enrich their speech.

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apart
from the practical reasons expressed above, I believe that
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reading
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books
also
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helps
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people
discover their
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own
unique version. A reason for this is that
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people
have
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different
ways to judge and interpret the issue due to their angle of view.
For example
, one person may find the jungle to be peaceful, while another may feel that there are
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many
wild beasts.
As a result
,
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reading
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books
give
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children
an opportunity to have independent thoughts and grow up to become their sole and irreplaceable version.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that
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reading
stories from
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books
give
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children
more benefits than watching
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tv
and playing games. In the future, it would be a way to evaluate the academic level of
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people
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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