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Some people believe that teachers should be responsible for teaching students the difference between right and wrong. Othersome say teachers should only teach academic subjects. v.1

Some people believe that teachers should be responsible for teaching students the difference between right and wrong. Othersome say teachers should only teach academic subjects. v. 1
Children are the future of any nation and this is mandatory to teach them basic values. Some people argued that trainers ought to teach pupils the distinction between right and wrong. While others believe that they just have the responsibility of teaching scholastic chapters. However, I support the former view due to some reasons. One the one hand, some masses think that educators should only teach academic subjects. First of all, teachers have limited time period for specific syllabus. In addition, due to tough competition, it is difficult to spend time for extra activities. In other words, if teachers spend their most of the time in teaching moral values then they will not cover them all chaptersorts as a result students will get low grades in their academic staff. For instance, if pupils want to become doctors, Engineer and Advocate etc, then they have to clear, though entrance exams those require strong academic skills. . Hence, teachers ought to teach only school subjects due to lack of time and high competition. One the other hand, I opine that the teaching difference between right and wrong should be the responsibility of teachers. The main reason is that pupils always obey their teachers more than others and spend most of their time in schools. In other words, teachers act as role models for their students and when teachers teach them what is right and what is wrong they will become good human beings. For example, nowadays most of the parents are working and admit their children in day boarding schools and school is a best place where they can easily learn moral values. Thus, teachers should their pupils distinction between right and wrong. To sum up, I reiterate that the teaching difference between right and wrong is the responsibility of educators because they act as role models for their students.
Children are the future of any nation and this is mandatory to
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teach
them basic values.
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people
argued that trainers ought to
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teach
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pupils
the distinction between
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right
and
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wrong
.
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While
others believe that they
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have the responsibility of
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teaching
scholastic chapters.
However
, I support the former view due to
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some
reasons.

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One
the one hand,
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some
masses
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think
that educators should
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only
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teach
academic subjects.
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First of all
,
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teachers
have limited
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time
period for specific syllabus.
In addition
, due to tough competition, it is difficult to spend
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time
for extra activities. In
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other
words, if
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teachers
spend their most of the
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time
in
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teaching
moral values then they will not cover them all
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chaptersorts
as a result
students will
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get
low grades in their academic staff.
For instance
, if
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pupils
want to become doctors, Engineer and Advocate etc, then they
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have to
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clear
, though entrance exams those require strong academic
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skills
.
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.
Hence
,
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teachers
ought to
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teach
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only
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school
subjects due to lack of
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time
and high competition.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the
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other
hand, I opine that the
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teaching
difference between
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right
and
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wrong
should be the responsibility of
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teachers
. The main reason is that
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pupils
always obey their
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teachers
more than others and spend most of their
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time
in
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schools
. In
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other
words,
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teachers
act as role models for their students and when
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teachers
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teach
them what is
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right
and what is
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wrong
they will become
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good
human beings.
For example
, nowadays most of the parents are working and admit their children in day boarding
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schools
and
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school
is
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a
best place where they can
easily
learn moral values.
Thus
,
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teachers
should their
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pupils
distinction between
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right
and
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wrong
.

To sum up, I reiterate that the
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teaching
difference between
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right
and
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wrong
is the responsibility of educators
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because
they act as role models for their students.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that teachers should be responsible for teaching students the difference between right and wrong. Othersome say teachers should only teach academic subjects. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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