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Some people believe that physical fitness of strong individuals and teams is the reason for most sports achievements Others however think that mental attitude is more important Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.3

Some people believe that physical fitness of strong individuals and teams is the reason for most sports achievements Others however think that mental attitude is more important 3
It is irrefutably true that achievements in the sports are the result of hard work, talent and strong commitment. However, some people say that physical fitness of sports players plays a key role to make massive accomplishments in the sports. By contrast, others claim mental attitude as the most salient factor behind sports achievements. Here, I would like to account for both sides with my own perception. There are manifold points to endorse the former view. First and foremost, players with sound physical fitness can put their hundred percent efforts for the victory of their team. Their performance looks extraordinary when they are good at fitness. Taking a real life example into consideration, once in a cricket match, a top class batsman Hershel Gibbs was playing exceptionally well against India. His team was very close to victory but unfortunately, he got injured while running for a single. Later, he was unable to take singles and got out while playing a big shot. This turned his team to lose the final match by only two runs. Hence, achievements in the crucial matches and tournaments depend a lot on the physical fitness of best players. On the contrary, others have conflicting views. They think that a robust mental attitude lays down the foundation of achievements in sports. Without strong mentality and positive attitude, making achievements seems a herculean task. To make it clear with one more real life example, South African cricket team is one of the best cricket teams in the world but they have never won any World Cup just because of less strong mental attitude or temperament. Many many times, it is noticed by the cricket fans and experts that the players of South Africa are unable to bear the pressure of big games and become mentally depressed under pressure situations. This results in quick loss of wickets and game over for African team. Consequently, mentally strong players are much needed to win awards in the sports. To recapitulate, undeniably, physical fitness has it’s own importance. However, in my opinion, a positive mind set up with the passion to win brings a massive success in sports.
It is
irrefutably
true that
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achievements
in the
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sports
are the result of
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hard
work, talent and
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strong
commitment.
However
,
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some
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people
say that
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physical
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fitness
of
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sports
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players
plays a key role to
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make
massive accomplishments in the
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sports
. By contrast, others claim mental
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attitude
as the most salient factor behind
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sports
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achievements
. Here, I would like to account for both sides with my
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own
perception.

There are manifold points to endorse the former view.
First
and foremost,
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players
with sound
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physical
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fitness
can put their hundred percent efforts for the victory of their
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team
. Their performance looks extraordinary when they are
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good
at
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fitness
. Taking a real life example into consideration, once in a
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cricket
match, a top
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class
batsman Hershel Gibbs was playing
exceptionally
well against India. His
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team
was
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very
close to victory
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but
unfortunately, he
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got
injured while running for a single. Later, he was unable to take singles and
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got
out while playing a
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big
shot. This turned his
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team
to lose the final match by
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only
two runs.
Hence
,
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achievements
in the crucial matches and tournaments depend a lot on the
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physical
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fitness
A determiner is probably missing here: "of the best".
of best
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players
.
On the contrary
, others have conflicting views.

They
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think
that a robust mental
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attitude
lays down the foundation of
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achievements
in
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sports
. Without
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strong
mentality and
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positive
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attitude
, making
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achievements
seems a
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herculean
task. To
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make
it
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clear
with one more real life example, South African
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cricket
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team
is one of the best
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cricket
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teams
in the world
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but
they have never won any World Cup
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just
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because
of less
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strong
mental
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attitude
or temperament.
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many
times, it
is noticed
by the
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cricket
fans and experts that the
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players
of South Africa are unable to bear the pressure of
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big
games and become mentally depressed under pressure situations. This results in quick loss of wickets and game over for African
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team
.
Consequently
, mentally
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strong
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players
are
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much needed
to win awards in the sports.

To recapitulate,
undeniably
,
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physical
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fitness
has
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it’s
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own
importance.
However
, in my opinion, a
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positive
mind set up with the passion to win brings a massive success in
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sports
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that physical fitness of strong individuals and teams is the reason for most sports achievements Others however think that mental attitude is more important 3

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