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Nowadays the importance of teachers is diminishing due to increased availability of alternative resources to students To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and support with relevant examples v.2

Nowadays the importance of teachers is diminishing due to increased availability of alternative resources to students with this statement 2
Education is the key to open the lock of success. Gone are the days when the trend of attaining education from teachers was quite prevalent all over the world. At present, the widespread availability of alternative learning sources is curtailing the significance of tutors at an alarming rate. This essay intends to disagree with the given statement entirely and some logical points will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs. There are manifold points to endorse my point of view. First and foremost, teaching skills of teachers make them matchless and their importance can never be faded by the alternative sources. To demonstrate, unlike technology, teachers can modify their methods of teaching according to the strength and abilities of students. This makes it possible for every pupil to understand the guideline conferred by teachers. What is more, an effective learning not only requires supreme guidance but also need inspiration, emotional support and a healthy learning environment that can only be provided by the teachers. Consequently, the role of a teacher in terms of learning is beyond compare. Further emphasising on my point of view, in this modern context, teachers are believed to be impeccable for making all around development of students. To illustrate, computers and projectors can provide education but they can neither prevent students from bad habits such as indiscipline, bunking class nor arouse them for co-curricular activities. On the other hand, teachers are well known for making students disciplined, punctual and making them good at sports and extra curricular activities. Needless to say, taking the place of teacher will remain a dream for technology forever. The presence of teachers also makes students realize their goals and helps them bring out their maximum inner potential. The urgency of teacher for the bright future of students is thus very clear and no any other alternative can become their replacement. To recapitulate, undeniably, technical resources are attracting the attention of people towards learning with audio video aids. However, the impact of teacher will always be a trademark and no any other replacement will work out.
Education is the key to open the lock of success. Gone
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are
the days when the trend of attaining education from
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teachers
was quite prevalent all over the world. At present, the widespread availability of alternative
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learning
sources is curtailing the significance of tutors at an alarming rate. This essay intends to disagree with the
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given
statement
entirely
and
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some
logical
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points
will
be discussed
in upcoming paragraphs.

There are manifold
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points
to endorse my
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point
of view.
First
and foremost, teaching
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skills
of
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teachers
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make
them matchless and their importance can never
be faded
by the alternative sources. To demonstrate, unlike technology,
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teachers
can modify their methods of teaching according to the strength and abilities of
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students
. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it possible for every pupil to understand the guideline conferred by
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teachers
.
What is more
, an effective
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learning
not
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only
requires supreme guidance
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but
also
need inspiration, emotional support and a healthy
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learning
environment that can
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only
be provided
by the
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teachers
.
Consequently
, the role of a
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teacher
in terms of
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learning
is beyond compare.

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Further
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emphasising
on my
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point
of view, in this modern context,
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teachers
are believed
to be impeccable for making all around development of
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students
. To illustrate, computers and projectors can provide education
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but
they can neither
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prevent
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students
from
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bad
habits such as indiscipline, bunking
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class
nor arouse them for co-curricular activities.
On the other hand
,
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teachers
are well known for making
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students
disciplined, punctual and making them
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good
at sports and
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extra curricular
activities. Needless to say, taking the place of
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teacher
will remain a dream for technology forever. The presence of
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teachers
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
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students
realize their goals and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them bring out their maximum inner potential. The urgency of
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teacher
for the bright future of
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students
is
thus
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very
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clear
and
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any other alternative can become their replacement.

To recapitulate,
undeniably
, technical resources are attracting the attention of
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people
towards
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learning
with audio video aids.
However
, the impact of
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teacher
will always be a trademark and
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any other replacement will work out.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the importance of teachers is diminishing due to increased availability of alternative resources to students with this statement 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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